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Fatal blast
Contributed by
holderofthestone
on
Tuesday, 1st June 2004 @ 11:46:37 PM in AEST
Topic:
Suicide
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fear and darkness trap you in
life will end but we dont know when
you know your life in hell begins
when you take things in your own hands
you take the gun and place it near
to your head right by your ear
you feel the adrenaline rushing through
and then the fear smashes you
you think about all your break ups
and lately how youve been so *****
you think about all your beatings
days and nights gone without eating
all the times you've screamed in your room
praying that life just end real soon
and now you realize how close you are
and how you've been living from afar
by the time they hear the fatal blast
your vital signs are fading fast
your life and blood run on the floor
the fear and hate youll feel no more
you feel the darkness creeping in
the light youll see never again
the pain is gone and so are you
and theres nothing left anyone can do
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2004-06-01 23:46:37]
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Re: Fatal blast
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by InnerBeautyQueen on
Tuesday, 1st June 2004 @ 11:53:58 PM AEST
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you know your life in hell begins
when you take things in your own hands
oooo i like that part... i do! you write really well |
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Re: Fatal blast
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by Silent-No-More on
Wednesday, 2nd June 2004 @ 12:50:04 AM AEST
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| Excellently crafted, holder.... I like the flow of this one. Flowed right along in my head as I read it... now - if I could just get it out! Well done... even if you're leaving me a bit short of breath rather than aching as per your norm. |
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Re: Fatal blast
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by venkat on
Wednesday, 2nd June 2004 @ 02:14:08 AM AEST
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| breath taking..and interesting read till the last line.. venkat |
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Re: Fatal blast
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by Princesaazul16 on
Wednesday, 2nd June 2004 @ 08:35:03 AM AEST
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Very good. I'm speachless. Keep up the good work.
~Stace~ |
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Re: Fatal blast
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by MDodgen on
Wednesday, 2nd June 2004 @ 11:01:18 AM AEST
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| very good job again. i loved it even if it was so dark. you had good imagery down to the end. |
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