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Oculi
Contributed by
inertia
on
Wednesday, 2nd June 2004 @ 01:07:46 AM in AEST
Topic:
DarkPoetry
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open up your eyes
to this crutch i hide behind
dancing in the dark, holding my heart
and i can't sleep tonight
draw your hands from my heart
close your beauty to my eyes
all the life in me, is you
and you're sound asleep tonight
speak up, let go
it's getting colder in your shadow
Love, you must not let me go
slave to the flesh
the vampire inside
never seems to sleep, always fiending
like he's hard and dry
draw your hands from my heart
close your beauty to my eyes
all the life in me, is you
and you're sound asleep tonight
speak up, let go
it's getting colder in your shadow
Love, you must let me go
it's getting colder in your shadow
...far too cold to cry...
Oculi,
resting on the satellite
Oculi,
just tell me goodnight
basking in your light
in an instant, i knew
i was love staring back at you
i am love,
staring back at you
Oculi,
come take me away
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inertia
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2004-06-02 01:07:46]
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Re: Oculi
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by venkat on
Wednesday, 2nd June 2004 @ 01:14:05 AM AEST
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| very enjoyable..well done.. venkat |
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Re: Oculi
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by evilfairy on
Wednesday, 2nd June 2004 @ 01:21:44 AM AEST
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| The second of your poems I've read and I love this one too. I can just feel the emotion in your words |
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Re: Oculi
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 2nd June 2004 @ 08:30:03 AM AEST
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I'm no expert, but I think this would make a great song lyric. I like the repetition over "colder in your shadow" - it really rolls off the tongue in a different way than I'm used to reading.
Good work.
Keep writing. |
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