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Fatal Words
Contributed by
comfortablynumb
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Thursday, 3rd June 2004 @ 02:24:58 PM in AEST
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You said those words
I tried not to hear them
You uttered them softly with the utmost care.
Like a perfect kiss under pale moonlight
Your words prickled my every hair.
But the chill that ran through me was not one of bliss
Nor was it from the winter's cold.
It was a chill of horror and fear
Fear of losing hold.
Get away, you're smothering me!
Get away, you're cutting off my air!
Please just take it all back
You don't mean what you said, I swear.
It was your words that held me down
But in my mind I saw your hands
Growing tighter around my neck
I couldn't handle your demands.
What was it that you wanted me to do?
Did you expect me to say 'I love you, too'?
Well maybe I do.
But it's too late now.
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Re: Fatal Words
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by Silent-No-More on
Sunday, 13th June 2004 @ 09:51:37 PM AEST
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I like this a lot... and I definately relate to it. 'I love you' seems so simple to some... too simple, I think. For others it can be overwhelming... can be difficult. I could have easily chosen 'Formerly Numb' in leui of Silent-No-More for my screen name. It took a long while to get to either though... regardless, I still remember the fear...
Thanks for sharing this! Nicely done! |
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Re: Fatal Words
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by Pyrofungus on
Sunday, 12th September 2004 @ 09:30:33 PM AEST
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i agree most people use i love you so sparingly...but those words mean so much, they're not just words to throw around!
great poem
please comment on my work too
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Re: Fatal Words
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by SweetRhythm on
Tuesday, 16th November 2004 @ 10:31:46 AM AEST
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whoa...powerfull stuff! Seems like one has had a busy time with emotions. Poem very well put together. Loved the rythem & flow it had to it. Hope one is not feeling to caged in & soon works it all out. Nevertheless thanks for sharing your work with us. Very enjoyable.
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