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Twilight's Waking
Contributed by
Black13
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Thursday, 3rd June 2004 @ 10:57:46 PM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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When you see tomorrows light
you will have weathered
yesterdays storms.
Sleep well tonight my child
I will hold you 'til you wake.
I will watch you
and keep bad dreams at bay.
As you open your eyes though
dear I must go as I am
only a dream.
You must have known
that I couldn't have stayed
no matter what I'd wanted.
So now I must walk away
but know I'll miss you.
So until next time you sleep
I will be in the shadows
waiting for you.
Copyright ©
Black13
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2004-06-03 22:57:46]
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Re: Twilight's Waking
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by ShadowDaughter on
Thursday, 3rd June 2004 @ 11:02:04 PM AEST
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. . . maybe I understand it . . . probably not. Or rather, in a different way . . . oh, well.
It was beautiful and would have been if it were written in gobbledegook and I didn't understand a word . . . so, from someone who probably doesn't understand . . . my compliments.
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Re: Twilight's Waking
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by wray on
Thursday, 3rd June 2004 @ 11:08:29 PM AEST
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I really like the way it started. Even if I don't know the personal story behind it, I think poems are supposed to be individually interpreted by the individual reader... right?
Anyway I love simple, understated verses. 'Emotional poetry' was the right category.
Except: dear I must go for as I am - should you have removed either the "for" or the "as"? |
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Re: Twilight's Waking
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by katyqueen35 on
Thursday, 3rd June 2004 @ 11:09:13 PM AEST
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Hmm very interesting write,
good job. |
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Re: Twilight's Waking
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by evilfairy on
Thursday, 3rd June 2004 @ 11:35:53 PM AEST
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This is just beautiful. i reall y enjoyed it. So
heartfelt and whimsical.....
i also had a little difficulty with the line
" dear I must go for as I am"
Had to reread it a couple of times and even
then it just didn't sit right with me. |
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Re: Twilight's Waking
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by Fionndruinne on
Friday, 4th June 2004 @ 03:17:23 AM AEST
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Hmm. To me this comes home as the things my imagination dreams about, and hopes for as well. Even, or perhaps especially, when times are rough. I've always found a sort of peace when I can finally end the weariness of the day, and it is not necessarily sleep.
But I have no real idea as to your feelings on this! Whatever they are, I like it much.
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Re: Twilight's Waking
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by Stitch on
Friday, 4th June 2004 @ 08:28:13 AM AEST
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I think I might know. Whether I understand or not, it is very beautiful and full of love and devotion. *smiles*
Stitch |
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Re: Twilight's Waking
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by jaeann on
Friday, 4th June 2004 @ 09:14:44 PM AEST
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| most writers never know how they touch a person's soul........you have talent beyond words........ |
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