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...Could have been...
Contributed by
reilt
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Friday, 4th June 2004 @ 01:39:19 PM in AEST
Topic:
SadPoetry
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Cast my mind
Time was wasting
Thoughts ran too far a distance
And stole too much of
What might have been spent
And my sorry flesh weeps
With sweat
In the heat of
Too many regrets
And grief
Yes, we became something
Still was that enough
When we had yet to sow
And you ached so to reap
More than I was willing
And for you to deny me blame
In this case
I cannot accept
My fault lies deep
Buried with the us that was,
The us that could have been.
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reilt
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2004-06-04 13:39:19]
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Re: ...Could have been...
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by drinkWATER on
Friday, 4th June 2004 @ 02:25:39 PM AEST
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| yes i detect pieces of darkness regret selfblame and slices of self mutillation. enjoyable |
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Re: ...Could have been...
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by FiggySue on
Saturday, 5th June 2004 @ 01:17:11 AM AEST
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| Excellent. I feel it's one of those poems that can be read and interpreted more than one way. Which in my opinion is the best kind. |
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Re: ...Could have been...
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by shelby on
Saturday, 5th June 2004 @ 06:16:18 AM AEST
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great cast of emotions well done
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Re: ...Could have been...
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by Stitch on
Tuesday, 8th June 2004 @ 10:24:06 AM AEST
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FANTASTIC! You are quite the poet. I am continually impressed.
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