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Blue
Contributed by
reilt
on
Tuesday, 8th June 2004 @ 10:27:16 AM in AEST
Topic:
toughstuff
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Blue dips me in
Its shade,
Colours the mood,
Blinded by the haze
Misty...
Oh this craze catches,
Controls,
Hinders my vision,
Shakes me to the core,
Wracks my being,
Wrecks my soul.
Where is the girl
I'm searching for?
Far-fetched wishes
Fly out the window
With my hope,
A crumpled mess
Upon the floor.
Soak the silence,
Drown in its depth
And the endless emptiness.
Lying lonely,
I fear this
Swallows me whole.
Despair consumes
Once more.
These are the days
That haunt me so
Into ruin.
Copyright ©
reilt
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2004-06-08 10:27:16]
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Re: Blue
(User Rating: 1 )
by Ina on
Tuesday, 8th June 2004 @ 04:11:28 PM AEST
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I really like your poetry and I go nuts cuz it feels like your inside my head BUT you have some issues with punctuation. Try writing a poem using no (.) and no (,) because the flow of your poem sometimes unecesarily stops with incorrect punctuation.
I like you and your poetry so much I want to help, yell at me if I am too bossy.
Scold me.
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Re: Blue
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by Hurretje on
Wednesday, 9th June 2004 @ 07:41:31 AM AEST
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Good write! And I can relate to it.
Greetz,
Hur |
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