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Diamond in my pupil
Contributed by
apollo
on
Tuesday, 8th June 2004 @ 08:12:15 PM in AEST
Topic:
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My pupils are enlarged
to provide more light
to peer through.
Can you see through
my diamond?
Try and see if you can.
Look close.
Open your eyes to adventure.
to heartbreak.
tragedy.
Then you will see in
my eyes.
You will know my
life.
You can now feel my
pain.
My struggle
My gift of life.
Being a miracle.
Born ever so young.
Imagine
Copyright ©
apollo
... [
2004-06-08 20:12:15]
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Re: Diamond in my pupil
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by TheVoice on
Tuesday, 8th June 2004 @ 09:23:10 PM AEST
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i like this very much.
the voice
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Re: Diamond in my pupil
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by arden on
Friday, 11th June 2004 @ 01:48:02 PM AEST
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awesome stuff here.
i really liked this one alot.
i look forward to more.
Arden |
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Re: Diamond in my pupil
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by Archie on
Saturday, 12th June 2004 @ 03:15:06 PM AEST
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This is a very good write, the answer kind of to "A Look Inside the Man"
Here is an excerpt:
"Do you marvel?
Do you wonder?
Do you ponder or consider
when you look into the eyes
of a brother or a sister?" |
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Re: Diamond in my pupil
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by Avarice_Riot on
Sunday, 13th June 2004 @ 03:08:05 AM AEST
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| Interesting use of style in presenting the words, there's a very good rhythm throughout the whole piece and it captivated me from start to finish. Very nicely done. |
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Re: Diamond in my pupil
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by deadbloodyrose on
Thursday, 17th June 2004 @ 07:15:45 PM AEST
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| i like this poem.. u did a nice job on it.. i got ur message and sent one back but im not sure if it went through.. im me later on aim..take care.. AMI JO |
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Re: Diamond in my pupil
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by Justalady on
Friday, 18th June 2004 @ 05:52:13 AM AEST
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| The eyes are the window to the soul..... Some are afraid to let others look too deeply. You've opened your eyes so we all may see. I tend to peer at others and than often find myself. Wonderful concept in this writing. Thanks for your comment on my work also. June |
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