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Deserts
Contributed by
ramfire
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Tuesday, 8th June 2004 @ 11:12:10 PM in AEST
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The desert holds a certain beauty rare.
A little rain will make the flowers grow.
For sleeping seeds that lay there dormant bare
can rise up showing wondrous colors so.
For ever changing dunes that wild wind blows
against the lodgings made of clay and stone.
Men hide in homes from screaming sirok woes,
their beasts cringe low in fright and softly moan.
A lonesome place of spikes and cactus kinds,
where rattlesnakes do seek for pry at night,
where dry and sandy gully plays and winds
a steep path going nowhere toward the right.
To stay on beaten tried path seems the way.
Another by your side if we do stray.
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ramfire
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2004-06-08 23:12:10]
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Re: Deserts
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by shelby on
Wednesday, 9th June 2004 @ 02:16:09 AM AEST
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enjoyable read great images I live in the desert I relate to this well written
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Re: Deserts
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by wray on
Thursday, 10th June 2004 @ 04:45:22 AM AEST
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| Very nice, I'm not a fan of the desert but you make it sound so alluring & mysterious. I'm not sure the ending of this poem sits well with me, seems unfinished somehow, but otherwise I like how you can make lines rhyme without them sounding silly. A technique I have yet to perfect. |
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Re: Deserts
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by buchi on
Thursday, 8th July 2004 @ 12:30:34 PM AEST
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Yet another awesome write...how very aptly you describe the desert..
For sleeping seeds that lay there dormant bare
can rise up showing wondrous colors so.
This is just plain fabulous!!...
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