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My offer to you
Contributed by
holderofthestone
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Wednesday, 9th June 2004 @ 08:11:29 PM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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I saw you there across the room.
Laughing...
smiling...
radiating...
and I realized that you are amazing.
With grace and pride you shine your light.
You provide for others,
you embrace life,
and value it's true worth...
and I see now that you are caring.
you stand strong and help others in need
you offer answers
you help make amends
to repair broken trusts
and I see that you are genuine
you accepted with open arms, never judge
you listen
take the time to look
and are always there
and I see that you are understanding.
I see so many things in you
yet each one is fully capable,
of entrancing me for an eternity...
I ask of you now,
open your eyes
open your arms
open your heart...
and give me a chance to make you my everything.
I present myself, all that I am.
I speak truthfully
I act honorably
I think only of you...
and now I offer myself to you for a lifetime...
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2004-06-09 20:11:29]
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Re: My offer to you
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by Silent-No-More on
Wednesday, 9th June 2004 @ 08:19:11 PM AEST
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holder - this is beautiful! The opening verse is fabulous... it may come off as simple to some - until - you consider how big a realization can be. If you get that - it's quite a powerful statement.
Very touching, holder... Nicely, nicely done! |
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Re: My offer to you
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by evilfairy on
Wednesday, 9th June 2004 @ 08:24:26 PM AEST
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Oh holder - it's just wonderful
"and I realized that you are amazing"
great stuff!!! a truly beautiful offer and a beautiful write! |
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Re: My offer to you
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by RhythmBndt on
Wednesday, 9th June 2004 @ 08:32:56 PM AEST
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| Sounds like a good example of first love :) |
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Re: My offer to you
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by poetrygodslove on
Wednesday, 9th June 2004 @ 08:49:24 PM AEST
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| hope that they open their arms to you back. this is a beautiful romantic poem. a relationship starting this way can go far. sandy good write. |
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Re: My offer to you
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by HellsLibrarian on
Thursday, 10th June 2004 @ 12:16:45 AM AEST
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| This is a very good poem. I hope to find someone to quote it to someday. However, it's "genuine," and in the very last line, there's a "t" in lifetime. |
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Re: My offer to you
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by Tom on
Thursday, 10th June 2004 @ 09:37:21 AM AEST
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| This poem lives! and i think thats what its all about. |
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Re: My offer to you
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by MDodgen on
Thursday, 10th June 2004 @ 12:12:51 PM AEST
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| beautiful style and even better words. wonderful job again. |
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Re: My offer to you
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 10th June 2004 @ 04:16:43 PM AEST
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I would be so honored to have someone feel this way about me. Whoever this is would be loved well if they accepted your heart. Truth and honor are two of the most valuable assets we hold.
Rita |
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Re: My offer to you
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by Living_In_My_Dream on
Friday, 11th June 2004 @ 02:31:15 AM AEST
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I AGREE with all of the comments I know that whoever opens their heart to you will never regret it...you have a lot of good traits girls look for...you just have to search for that one special girl to recieve them...and the one your crazed about now..doesnt realize what huge mistake she is making...your a great writer...I love it...
much love,
Dani
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Re: My offer to you
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by Calista on
Thursday, 17th June 2004 @ 11:55:53 PM AEST
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you have a way of writing that makes me wanna fall on the floor and catch my breath lol its too bad about this girl not seeing how wonderful you are, and could be good luck in love and hey...incredible
~Calista |
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Re: My offer to you
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 17th April 2006 @ 12:44:57 AM AEST
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| I know its a little late but does that offer still stand or is it to late |
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