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The Horesman's Final Ride
Contributed by
TheRealm
on
Thursday, 10th June 2004 @ 03:35:58 AM in AEST
Topic:
mythology
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On head of mighty stead
They rode through the heavens and hell
To reach there final destination of our purpose
But for we where betrayed by consent
Once we reached the promised land
A cry outreached of the blood drenched eyes
Like water we flew through
our capes like the night and day swirled upon the wind
Like the dance of a dead mans truth
As we witnessed skulls scream to the dead
And upon a throne, mighty for the known
Stood a man, wicked was his face sewn
A raised hand and an evil glare
Sent us away again.
You beings so minute to your founding
Were us astonished
Your pleads for the future
And of your sins in hope
For your future was not ours
For your futures
Were not of our device
But of the famine and war
Death and pestilence
We reeked a havoc
We rode the horses, bloodied and willing
To the men of evil lay astern
For earth we had no decision
That is why we apologize
We have a distaste for our reason
And surely you do too
You must distaste your reason?
But us
We have no choice
We were sent with no will.
And little did we know
Our purpose we saw clear
For we
The horsemen
Were meant to ride
Across the sky
For we want to say
To the new beginning
Please allow us the choice
For your futures
We hope to take care of
For the heart clad in hate
Is a heart sympathetic to your needs
Please give us the choice
For we do not want
To see again
The horsemens
Final ride
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Re: The Horesman's Final Ride
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 10th June 2004 @ 04:54:25 AM AEST
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Interesting write.
I was left a little confused by your choice of words in places;
"We rode the horses, bloodied and willing
To the men of evil lay astern"
But this is a mere grammatical consideration. The inspiration behind it remains powerful and thoughtful.
Well done. |
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Re: The Horesman's Final Ride
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by Rakerman1999 on
Thursday, 10th June 2004 @ 08:58:17 AM AEST
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good imaginative write.
Welcome to ypdc
Larry |
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Re: The Horesman's Final Ride
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 10th June 2004 @ 09:06:04 AM AEST
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This is an apocolyptic write. The words are somewhat exhausting, but they give the reader time to contemplate the meaning beind each line. I like this. Keep on writing! And welcome to YPDC!!! Post more!! 0:-)
Angel always...godspeed...joni |
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Re: The Horesman's Final Ride
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by Jackman on
Thursday, 10th June 2004 @ 09:46:32 AM AEST
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| yeah!! wonderfully nihilistic, excellent language, powerfully written. A very enjoyable read (if a little bit scary lol) |
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