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Everytime
Contributed by
holderofthestone
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Friday, 11th June 2004 @ 09:21:39 PM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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everytime I close my eyes
I only see your face
everytime I bite my lip
I only get your taste
everytime I try to run
you tie me to the ground
everytime I reached for your hand
you always pushed me down
everytime I think of you
it makes me miss you more
everytime I picture you
I see a closing door
everytime I swore to you
you'd be my one and only
everytime you ignored me
intending to leave me lonely
everytime I tried to change
to be a better man
everytime I begged of you
you never gave a damn
everytime I try to forget
to just let you fade away
everytime I fail
just like every other day....
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holderofthestone
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2004-06-11 21:21:39]
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Re: Everytime
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by Essentially9 on
Friday, 11th June 2004 @ 09:25:34 PM AEST
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i can relate to this. excellent write always.
everytime the ink flows the greatness shows, a lame rhyme to brighten your day. |
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Re: Everytime
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by Silent-No-More on
Friday, 11th June 2004 @ 09:36:18 PM AEST
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Oh holder - I do like this one very much! The opening is incredible - those first four lines could stand alone and would be plenty. This flows beautifully and... as so often happens with your poetry... leaves me feeling heavy hearted. Beautiful. Truly.
Sighing -
SNM |
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Re: Everytime
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by Living_In_My_Dream on
Friday, 11th June 2004 @ 09:39:43 PM AEST
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I relate...I know I relate to a lot of your poems...lol but still I love your work I cant stop reading lol their so powerful the wording its great I thought this one...very emotional...great work....
much love,
Dani
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Re: Everytime
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 11th June 2004 @ 09:48:10 PM AEST
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I guess everyone can or will relate to this sometime in their life. It brought back memories of when I had these very same thoughts. It is deeply distressing when you live it. You are an excellent writer. I will watch more closely.
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Re: Everytime
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by shelby on
Friday, 11th June 2004 @ 10:00:07 PM AEST
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a most touching write lovely flow
michelle |
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Re: Everytime
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by Chimo on
Saturday, 12th June 2004 @ 01:04:46 AM AEST
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| That's cool |
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Re: Everytime
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by InnerBeautyQueen on
Saturday, 12th June 2004 @ 02:46:05 AM AEST
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//everytime I think of you
it makes me miss you more//
very good! those are my favorite lines
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Re: Everytime
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by pixie on
Saturday, 12th June 2004 @ 10:55:15 AM AEST
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A trully great write
pixie xx
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Re: Everytime
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by xSlashXPrettyXSkinx on
Saturday, 12th June 2004 @ 04:42:01 PM AEST
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Very well written. Great job.
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Re: Everytime
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by ladyfawn on
Saturday, 12th June 2004 @ 05:38:48 PM AEST
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powerfully packed well woven wrords into an excellent and beautiful poem:) hugs n' love nessa
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Re: Everytime
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by wolfwynd on
Saturday, 12th June 2004 @ 05:51:18 PM AEST
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| I can relate to this completely, its how I feel right now and reading this has brought back memories and feelings - great write! |
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Re: Everytime
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by wray on
Sunday, 13th June 2004 @ 09:13:02 AM AEST
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everytime I reached for your hand
you always pushed me down
I like how you incorporate the mixed feelings of love/longing/despair here. I never realised before, but everytime is quite a powerful word. |
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Re: Everytime
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by SweetRhythm on
Tuesday, 15th June 2004 @ 09:24:27 AM AEST
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Awh whoa you can almost feel your pain. Can relate very much to your sentiments. Excellent write, I enjoyed it immensely. Beautiful heart grabbing peace of work. Thanks for sharing.
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Re: Everytime
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by Calista on
Wednesday, 16th June 2004 @ 01:46:31 AM AEST
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holder, holder, holder. are you capable of anything less than beautiful? as i have said before, i am in love with your writing. this is a very special piece. bittersweet. thank you,
~Calista |
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Re: Everytime
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by blueheart on
Wednesday, 16th June 2004 @ 11:24:25 PM AEST
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| I am growing more and more fond of your writing. Lovely write, you used wonderful words to weave emotion into this write. :) |
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