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Out of Africa
Contributed by
Elena
on
Sunday, 13th June 2004 @ 03:11:27 PM in AEST
Topic:
Grief
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No cemetery, no gravestones
No maids mourning, no maids alive
Just an empty wasteland
A great wall torn down.
Broken brick upon broken brick.
Bleached bones cleansed in the sun.
Vaste wasteland.
Theres a tale to tell here
Something ominous in the air
That the Namib wind
Will not set free.
A secret on parched lips.
Buried in the desert sand.
A massacre, a genocide?
No attempt to hide
The evidence,
To rescue the wounded,
To take prisoners alive -
Just the account of a diamond mine
Discovered 11 miles due South.
Copyright ©
Elena
... [
2004-06-13 15:11:27]
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Re: Out of Africa
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by betty on
Sunday, 13th June 2004 @ 03:57:11 PM AEST
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| Good. I like the broken brick imagery. Hard to determine a political or emotional tone, maybe you were going for both. Overall, good poem. |
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Re: Out of Africa
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 13th June 2004 @ 05:07:39 PM AEST
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Black hearted destruction. More sadness in the world, loose and barbaric. Loss of the forever kind, never to be regained. Magnificent writing.
Rita |
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Re: Out of Africa
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 14th June 2004 @ 05:16:54 AM AEST
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I am unaware of the event - I haven't heard of it before, or if I have - i've forgotten. Although I didn't get the detail and understand the cause, I'll believe that it was justified in its ambiguity.
Very good write. |
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Re: Out of Africa
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by lovingcritters on
Friday, 18th June 2004 @ 01:51:44 AM AEST
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Fantastic Poem.....you made me feel all the horror and injustice......even the mystery. There is so much of this going on, doesn't surprize me, but it is so sad!
You did a very good job on this one.....I'll remember it for a very long time!
Poetic hugs
consue |
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