|
 Menu
|
|
|
|
|
Social
|
|
|
|
|
Inside of Me
Contributed by
xxbreathlessx
on
Sunday, 13th June 2004 @ 06:58:12 PM in AEST
Topic:
oops
|
im so sick of bearing my soul
to people who dont understand
im so sick of giving my all
and fail once again
my soul is such a vast
pool of mixed perceptions
my heart still yearns for someone
who accepts my creations
who can dive into the pool
of all that is me
and not to drown in eternal complexity
or to question the flow of my hand,
the writing of my soul
please someone, open up the heavens for me
let me know someone is capable to understand,
to let my heart be free
to let it beat each word with simplicity
let it pulse through my viens the rhythem
of love or pain
someone who can understand these words
of my acid rain
or maybe i should close my heart for noone to see
the true story written inside of me
to keep close my wandering soul
so they cant hear the song of
melancholy,
pain or
belief
that is singing its heart out to me
that carries every note of passion so perfectly
creating its own sculpture of emotion,
its own masterpiece of life
what a shame it would be
to keep feelings as wide as an ocean
inside of me....
Copyright ©
xxbreathlessx
... [
2004-06-13 18:58:12]
(Date/Time posted on
site)
Advertisments:
|
|
|
|
|
|
Sorry, comments are no longer allowed for anonymous, please register for a free membership to access this feature and more
|
|
All comments are owned by the poster. Your Poetry
Dot Com is not responsible for the content of any
comment.
That said, if you find an offensive comment, please
contact via the FeedBack Form with details, including poem title
etc.
|
|
|
Re: Inside of Me
(User Rating: 1 )
by Archie on
Sunday, 13th June 2004 @ 07:06:00 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
I will not be the one to drive you from your pensivity. Your poem is good just try to not misspell words. That will make you a better writer then the sky will open for you.
"For me let there be simplicity" |
|
|
Re: Inside of Me
(User Rating: 1 )
by Former_Member on
Sunday, 13th June 2004 @ 07:06:33 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
hello
i loved this poem,it was great,you write it with so much feeling and emotion.i know what ur talking about,don't worry,everything will sort out and you'll be happy if you keep your faith,trust me.
love,
Andrea |
|
|
Re: Inside of Me
(User Rating: 1 )
by liquidsunshine on
Sunday, 13th June 2004 @ 07:41:15 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
I really like this. It's got a great flowing rhythm that adds to the way it conveys your thoughts. I REALLY love this. No joke--this is one of my favorites on the site so far as I've seen.
BRAVO and ENCORE!!!!
Lots of love and peace be with you,
Chelsea |
|
|
Re: Inside of Me
(User Rating: 1 )
by lilch4ever on
Sunday, 13th June 2004 @ 07:43:12 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
| I could really relate to this poem to how your feeling inside. It's tough and you'll get throw it. Excellent write. Wonderfully written. Keep up the good work. Such an emotionally write and very deep with insight. Just lovely. |
|
|
Re: Inside of Me
(User Rating: 1 )
by ladyfawn on
Sunday, 13th June 2004 @ 08:55:21 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
absolutely breathtakingly beautiful, hugs n' love nessa
@->>->:- |
|
|
Re: Inside of Me
(User Rating: 1 )
by waos on
Sunday, 13th June 2004 @ 09:49:15 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
| that was amazing, i so agree with it. i know how you feel too. i'm told to talk to people, that that's how they'll help, but they can't help because they don't understand. you put it into words beautifully |
|
|
Re: Inside of Me
(User Rating: 1 )
by Joker17 on
Monday, 14th June 2004 @ 04:43:16 AM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
Very well written. You and I feel the same, we are on the same page. Look where I was, and where I am now. Patience is the key, I should talk right, but time changes things, sometimes for the better. Hang on tight, and it will come around. You can always talk to me, I understand.
J Samuelson (Joker17) |
|
|
Re: Inside of Me
(User Rating: 1 )
by pixie on
Monday, 14th June 2004 @ 09:34:38 AM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
this is such a good ppoem, thanks for sharing
pixie xx |
|
|
Re: Inside of Me
(User Rating: 1 )
by MDodgen on
Monday, 14th June 2004 @ 02:51:33 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
wonderful imagery, i love the lines:
who can dive into the pool
of all that is me
and not to drown in eternal complexity.
good job. thanks for the comment on my poem too. |
|
|
Re: Inside of Me
(User Rating: 1 )
by Living_In_My_Dream on
Saturday, 26th June 2004 @ 08:52:29 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
wow omg I loved this so much beutufully written keep it up keep it coming...
much love,
Dani |
|
|
Re: Inside of Me
(User Rating: 1 )
by oneteartofellpain on
Tuesday, 6th July 2004 @ 04:08:50 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
hey grl....damn NOW this is what i call poetry u can write...hell yeah u can write...dont hide ur feelings or keep stuff bottled in...cry if u wan cry...that releases some pain...i know...trust me...my room is my onli room that keeps me sane...im here for u for when times get shady witchu...i know we dont know each other..lol but hey its good to have someone when we need em right? well i can be there 4 u if u want...keep writin this xplicit masterpieces mannn i enjoy ur work...KEEP up the good work!!!!!!!!!
love n respect,
yazmin |
|
|
|
· 
Poetry
Site Help
Members
Areas
Reference
Search
Top
Others
