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My letter of resignation
Contributed by
01_zanzebar
on
Tuesday, 15th June 2004 @ 10:41:08 AM in AEST
Topic:
goodbyepoetry
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what are you gonna do
when my bags are packed
and im ready to leave you
did you plan for my heart
did you care what i meant
did i think not more of less more than of ya?
lets sit at the disscusion table
what wentr wrong eh?
we were rokin
now our love is dead
feels so flat and boring
we went too OTT too soon
now its just blah
when we was yeah!
could it of been me
i blame you
but it could of been me
but what does it matter anyway
my steamer trunk
and im gonna get the next ride outta here
phone me if u can answer me right
and i might be sorry that i left
you made me the theif of love
and send me back to the prision in my soul
for the grand crime of love theift
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01_zanzebar
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2004-06-15 10:41:08]
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Re: My letter of resignation
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by pixie on
Tuesday, 15th June 2004 @ 11:30:45 AM AEST
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good poem,
pixie xx |
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Re: My letter of resignation
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by Luinil on
Tuesday, 15th June 2004 @ 01:08:19 PM AEST
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| unique style... interesting writing. good job * |
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Re: My letter of resignation
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by ksprincess42004 on
Tuesday, 15th June 2004 @ 03:37:16 PM AEST
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| I like your unique style, although it needs fine tuning. It seems like you are trying to fit in too much information and so it doesn't make sense alot of the time. Perhaps creating fewer, more emotionally charged phrases could help. Also, check your spelling man! Otherwise I liked it. |
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