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Trying to show you
Contributed by
holderofthestone
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Saturday, 19th June 2004 @ 01:24:14 PM in AEST
Topic:
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If there was a way for me to show you
how much pain
how much hurt
how many tears
that you have caused me...
If there was a way for me to do to you
to break your will
to ruin your life
to just up and leave
just like you did to me...
If I had the chance to break you down
destroy your mind
kill your soul
to crush your heart
I dont think I would or could....
because I still love you so much
I couldnt stand to see you go through
what you put me through....
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2004-06-19 13:24:14]
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Re: Trying to show you
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by Living_In_My_Dream on
Saturday, 19th June 2004 @ 01:29:10 PM AEST
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wow, that was a beautiful write lots of emotion and feeling flowing through it...I enjoyed it however...I dont think I would either do that to the one i love....keep it up...
much love,
Dani
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Re: Trying to show you
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by pixie on
Saturday, 19th June 2004 @ 01:34:20 PM AEST
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Awwww Chris, this is very very emotional, this is a poem that has raw feeling behind it, I am sorry that you have to go through this pain, you are not alone, you have a friend in me, thanks for being brave and sharing this with us all (((HUGS)))
Pixie xx |
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Re: Trying to show you
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by pyrofairyburning on
Saturday, 19th June 2004 @ 01:49:21 PM AEST
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Angsty, ..... , Yepperdee. I think the very last stanza could be elaborated on though. How much, mainly in adjective (which you lack), do you love said person ? Intreguing concept, but an okay poem. 5 outa 10.
Blessed Be,
Tink |
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Re: Trying to show you
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by Calista on
Saturday, 19th June 2004 @ 01:57:55 PM AEST
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this is a very sweet write, holder....im glad you can see that you are a different type of person with that kind of love. good good job again
~Calista |
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Re: Trying to show you
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by carmen_queasy on
Saturday, 19th June 2004 @ 02:07:58 PM AEST
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| That poem brought so much meaning to me. I can relate to the pain you have been through. It was really emotional and passionate. |
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Re: Trying to show you
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by Essentially9 on
Saturday, 19th June 2004 @ 02:15:31 PM AEST
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| =], you are a very considerate person who doesnt believe in revenge i see. very emotional, excellent piece as always. and ye who seeks what is sought will find more than ever thought. |
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Re: Trying to show you
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 19th June 2004 @ 02:16:47 PM AEST
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You have a good heart. Revenge or avenging pain generally ends up only causing more pain. What is really gained by it? Guilt usually in the end.
Rita |
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Re: Trying to show you
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by rugby_player on
Saturday, 19th June 2004 @ 11:42:57 PM AEST
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| I loved this. I've felt the same way about someone before. It sucks but you just gotta keep going through life great job |
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