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I Wish I May, I Wish I Might
Contributed by
ShadowDaughter
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Tuesday, 22nd June 2004 @ 03:19:52 AM in AEST
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star light, star bright,
sweetest star within my sight
shine on me and light imbue
for I can never shine on you.
stardust, grant me;
glimmer, please, that I might see.
would that I could shine for you--
a single lamp can't lumine two.
star gleams, daydreams,
envy I your astral beams
how dare you shine when I cannot?
--I used to want that glow you've got.
star cool, hope rust--
shine to burn to ash to dust
if I could, for you I'd blaze
and we would light each other's ways
star fade, star plight
a lampstruck moth, I crave your light
you're shivering, for I've no shine--
I need your warmth but can't give mine.
star light, star bright,
gleam and glint for me tonight
I can't reciprocate, you know,
but shining star, I love your glow.
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Re: I Wish I May, I Wish I Might
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by STRaNGe_LiNDSeY on
Tuesday, 22nd June 2004 @ 03:30:29 AM AEST
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Nora,
As always this is amazing. You may not be able to finish many but you finished this one and thats all that matters, cause it's one of the best I've seen from you. I am so glad you shared this with me. I am in complete awe of the poem and your abilities. You have such a talent, which is beyond my grasp because of you age. But you continually outdo yourself and all of the people on this site. This is a phenominal write. The feelings and emotions and the way you surround it in this daydream, is amazing. Absolutely PHENOMINAL. You have a true talent. This couldnt have been more perfect.
Thank you,
*still in awe*
Lindsey
PS. Nora thought of the title...I just helped her with ideas. |
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Re: I Wish I May, I Wish I Might
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by TheLastStringCut on
Tuesday, 22nd June 2004 @ 03:33:05 AM AEST
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| I'll keep this short and sweet. That was wicked. Great write, made me happy, and think to myself that I suck. ^_^ Awesome. |
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Re: I Wish I May, I Wish I Might
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 22nd June 2004 @ 03:52:21 AM AEST
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OK, I'm lazy. I was going to go back to front again, continuing on from last night, but I couldn't resist reading your latest. Anyway - I'm glad I did, for this is well thought-out and flows in rhymes so easily.
I like the subject matter, as you manage to draw it out effectively with lines like;;
"you're shivering, for I've no shine--
I need your warmth but can't give mine."
Lovely writing. |
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Re: I Wish I May, I Wish I Might
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by emystar on
Tuesday, 22nd June 2004 @ 06:01:13 AM AEST
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Veery creative, beautifull masterpeice.
hugs,
emy |
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Re: I Wish I May, I Wish I Might
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by poetrygodslove on
Tuesday, 22nd June 2004 @ 06:28:53 AM AEST
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| this is something to think about... You say it is about loving someone and not getting it in return.. I didn't read it this way. but then again if your talking this way. I dont think it is right. because your putting yourself down. you shine just as good as that person. your just as good as them. maybe i dont understand it.. very creative work sandy |
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by blueheart on
Tuesday, 22nd June 2004 @ 07:10:43 AM AEST
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Nora, you write amazing poems.
I absolutely loved this one, the way it rhymed and flowed, a perfect piece.
Great write. |
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Re: I Wish I May, I Wish I Might
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by pixie on
Tuesday, 22nd June 2004 @ 08:01:29 AM AEST
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Great poem, keep em coming and I shall keep reading :):)
takecare
pixie xx |
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Re: I Wish I May, I Wish I Might
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by Kie on
Tuesday, 22nd June 2004 @ 08:12:14 AM AEST
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This was lovely, a bit sad and softly tugged at the heart strings.
Very beautiful words so elegantly placed.
I find myself quite impressed with this poem of yours.
Well done :) |
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 22nd June 2004 @ 05:08:36 PM AEST
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| I loved this - the familiarity of the verse was a great draw into what I think was a thoughtful well written poem |
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by Vitreous_Soul on
Tuesday, 22nd June 2004 @ 07:34:44 PM AEST
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Nora...this is so exquisitely written, so enchanting is the imagery; and yet, there are tinges of despondency, heartbreak and hopelessness. Of course it's brilliant from a technical standpoint, but i've come to expect no less from you.
This is the best poem i've read in weeks, and I love every last word.
Drowned 'neath a frozen lake,
-Dan |
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Re: I Wish I May, I Wish I Might
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by Eve on
Wednesday, 23rd June 2004 @ 12:02:53 PM AEST
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The metaphors, the references...
Forget autographing; I'm going into screaming sign-waving fangirl mode if I ever see you.
My heart weeps for you, Nora, if only because it knows the same feelings.
Wonderful wonderful wonderful.
Keep writing,
-Eve. |
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by Fionndruinne on
Tuesday, 29th June 2004 @ 06:45:30 PM AEST
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Utterly poignant and beautiful. The imagery is splendid.
This is sad, as well. I hope things look up for you, friend. Remember things really are almost always darkest before the dawn.
Nai anar caluva tielyanna,
Andrew |
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by Cynthia on
Wednesday, 22nd September 2004 @ 05:35:22 PM AEST
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| Nora, what a great verse. Keep penning on my friend. *S* Cynthia |
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