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Split
Contributed by
luinil
on
Tuesday, 22nd June 2004 @ 08:39:29 AM in AEST
Topic:
oops
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Open your eyes better to see
They're veins flow with treachery
That's not friendship, only pity
They like whoever I choose to be
They would never abandon me
No, they are friends; I've no enemy
They're deceiving you with flattery
They steal your blood to pay their fee
Liars, thieves, deceiving and phony
I won't be blinded by trickery
i've given no reason for them to hate me
No, you've confused me with somebody
You're too slow, too meak, too sorry, too chubby
Too stupid, too weird, too bad, really
Listen to them talking, listen more closely
But, they're smiling and talking happily...
Now they're talking much more softly
Talking about me? Could that really be?
Of course I'm right, don't be silly
You are a lone-- there is nobody
Now i've got you; you'll never be free
Copyright ©
luinil
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2004-06-22 08:39:29]
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Re: Split
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by Shadow on
Tuesday, 22nd June 2004 @ 01:28:54 PM AEST
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| I love the first part but the last 4 stanzas are seeming kinda rushed. It lost it's awsome rhym. Just my opinion. I can feel the pain in it and a serton emotion rising. Good wright. |
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