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TRUE LIE
Contributed by
frejya
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Tuesday, 22nd June 2004 @ 09:03:06 AM in AEST
Topic:
Grief
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She's not breathing, no one can see
Wonder if she can hear me
Hold my hand to hold yourself
Don't keep me warm when your cold yourself
Numb in core, lacking a soul
Living zero, existing whole
No freedom, no chains
No glee, no pains
Only numbness in veins
Can shiver but can't move
All senses denying to prove
Lost me behind miles
Result is paying hell for smiles
Captivated by the frailty of mind
Living in what you've left behind
Tell me your name, who's the one I see
Mirror, mirror, lie to me!
Copyright ©
frejya
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2004-06-22 09:03:06]
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Re: TRUE LIE
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 22nd June 2004 @ 09:04:42 AM AEST
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| clever write |
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Re: TRUE LIE
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by SweetRhythm on
Tuesday, 22nd June 2004 @ 09:30:53 AM AEST
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Entrigen poem, well writen.
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Re: TRUE LIE
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by loveisendless on
Tuesday, 22nd June 2004 @ 09:46:58 AM AEST
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DON'T EXPECT TOO MUCH OF YOURSELF!
IS THAT WHAT YOU MEAN?! WHAT EVER IT WAS~IT WAS A GREAT WRITE FREJYA!!!!
DAN!!!! |
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Re: TRUE LIE
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by ceci on
Tuesday, 22nd June 2004 @ 11:09:47 AM AEST
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Nice poem
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Re: TRUE LIE
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by pixie on
Tuesday, 22nd June 2004 @ 11:25:33 AM AEST
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great write,
pixie xx |
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Re: TRUE LIE
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 23rd June 2004 @ 06:30:28 AM AEST
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An alluring work, which falls down over the following lines;
"Lost me behind miles
Result is paying hell for smiles"
You lost me there, and I couldn't find your trace afterwards. Sorry. |
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Re: TRUE LIE
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by Pyrofungus on
Wednesday, 23rd June 2004 @ 05:32:06 PM AEST
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Wow thats good...i was reading this while i was listening to the cure pictures of you...it really got to me...
please comment on my work too
Summer |
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