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Pleasure Of The End
Contributed by
nail-to-the-head
on
Thursday, 24th June 2004 @ 07:06:25 PM in AEST
Topic:
Suicide
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I Slit my wrists
and hope to die,
Stab a knife
into my thigh,
A quick sharp twist
a cry of pain,
Dark coulds above
floods of rain,
The thought of death
seems so near,
I smile with pleasure
I have no fear,
Blood pours out
puddles on my bed,
I'll say goodbye now
for soon I shall be dead.
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Re: Pleasure Of The End
(User Rating: 1 )
by pixie on
Thursday, 24th June 2004 @ 07:21:21 PM AEST
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great flow, ...very dark write, i used to feel like this.hope you find a reason to live like i did..
hugs and takecare,
pixie xx |
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Re: Pleasure Of The End
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by Kirby on
Thursday, 24th June 2004 @ 07:34:07 PM AEST
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| This was a great poem. I liked how the words flowed and rhymed. It was very dark but also good. Keep em coimg but I hope that a happier period comes into your life. Poetry is such a good way to speak what no one else can feel. Love::::Kirby |
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Re: Pleasure Of The End
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by Essentially9 on
Thursday, 24th June 2004 @ 10:33:12 PM AEST
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| i agree with the other comments. very nice structure indeed. =] |
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Re: Pleasure Of The End
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by hisbeautifulnightmare on
Friday, 25th June 2004 @ 04:42:06 PM AEST
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| very nice rhyming...the line "dark clouds above/floods of rain" really grabbed me...this poem is really really good! |
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