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if i could
Contributed by
tangle
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Friday, 25th June 2004 @ 03:54:58 PM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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If I could give the world
maybe i could charm this girl
if i could fly away things would be better
but im grounded with the weight of your love
if i could say the write line
would it be a waste of time
take me out
tease me
you were always good at that
you said friends at first with a kiss
that you knew I would miss
if i could start over
you would not be apart of the begining
i say this and more
cause im the bad guy you could never adore
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tangle
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2004-06-25 15:54:58]
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Re: if i could
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by oldernotwiser on
Friday, 25th June 2004 @ 04:20:56 PM AEST
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| I like this -- just a couple of things were not clear. Did you mean a part like -- I would have never let you in in the first place, or did you mean apart like seperated or did you just want to leave it ambiguous? Do you mean right line? Or were you looking for the double meaning there also? |
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Re: if i could
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by oldernotwiser on
Friday, 25th June 2004 @ 04:24:14 PM AEST
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p.s.
are you sure she's given up on you? |
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Re: if i could
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by emystar on
Friday, 9th July 2004 @ 06:52:36 AM AEST
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Great job here and it's very deep.
I have no problem here understanding anything.
Sshe should adore u for your writing talent alone.
Hang tuff and anything good is worth waiting for.
Put some confidence in yourself and keep the faith.
huggs,
emy |
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