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can I just please stop....
Contributed by
Living_In_My_Dream
on
Saturday, 26th June 2004 @ 11:49:01 PM in AEST
Topic:
selfstruggles
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Cant I stop,
just because it hurts?
Cant I stop,
just because I hate what I do?
Cant I stop,
just because I want to?
Cant I stop,
just because life isnt that bad?
Cant I stop,
just because I know?
Cant I stop,
just because I say so?
Cant I stop,
just because it makes it worse?
Cant I stop,
just because I know its wrong?
Cant I stop,
just because Ive done it for so long?
Cant I stop,
just because it could get better?
Cant I stop,
just because Im not that far gone?
Cant I stop,
just because soon Ill be much to torn?
Cant I stop,
just because Im afraid?
Cant I stop,
just because people will see?
Cant I stop,
just because I see what it does to me?
Cant I stop,
just not do this anymore?
Cant I stop,
just so I dont have to lie?
Cant I stop,
just so I dont cry?
I dont think I can stop,
I try so hard
I wish I would stop,
I wish that could
If I could stop,
I would...
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Re: can I just please stop....
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by emystar on
Saturday, 26th June 2004 @ 11:58:18 PM AEST
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Hang tuff, my friend as there is always hope.
Never give up trying, never!
Life is hard for everyone so u can do it.
I'll be praying for u. Prayer definently changes things as I live in faith but even the I have much faith I still get discouraged at times but it's those time when my faith isn't up to par then I rely on others faith. I am a walking miracle and it would take much time to count my miracles.The writing is great and jus know I care and will be pryaing 4 u.
luv, hugggs, faith, hope, peace,
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Re: can I just please stop....
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by loveisendless on
Sunday, 27th June 2004 @ 12:01:49 AM AEST
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SOUNDS LIKE SOMETHING TO DO WITH SELF DESTRUCTION! I DID IT FOR SO LONG & HAVE ENDLESS SCARS B/C OF IT!!
YOU'VE GOTTEN THROUGH THE HARDEST PART~ADMITTING YOU HAVE A PROBLEM & WANNA STOP!!! IF YOU'VE GOT THE GUTS TO TELL US THEN I THINK YOU HAVE THE STRENGTH TO OVER COME IT!!!! NEVER LET IT GET THE BEST OF YOU!!!!! I'M HERE ALONG WITH EVERYONE ELSE IF YOU NEED SOMEONE TO TALK TO!!!!!! GOD BLESS YOU & DO TAKE CARE OF IT & YOU!!!!!!!
DAN!!!!!!!! |
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Re: can I just please stop....
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by TheLastStringCut on
Sunday, 27th June 2004 @ 12:06:56 AM AEST
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That was a pretty poem, sad though. If you ever wanna chat, hun, then jus' send me a message, and I'll help ya through. You are loved here. I liked how it was written, the poem, it was sad, but beautiful.
-Jeff |
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Re: can I just please stop....
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by kidpoet_213 on
Sunday, 27th June 2004 @ 12:30:56 AM AEST
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I agree with every one of the previous comments... Hang tuff... life is full of hope... 'cause all u need is a little hope... u can do this... u can stop whatever it is ur doing!!! Just don't give up and don't give in...
I f u need someone to talk to we're all here... we love u... just contact any of us... I'd be happy to chat with u... and help anyway I can...
~Donna~ |
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Re: can I just please stop....
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by nexxa on
Sunday, 27th June 2004 @ 02:19:46 AM AEST
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Well first of all very intense poem but I'm not really sure if the comments you are wanting are for whatever it is that you are trying to stop or for your poetry both is important and needed to help the soul and the mind so on the point of whatever it is you are trying to stop every comment before this is right on the money and as you can see support is all around you secondly writing is one of the best forms of therapy keep it up!!
As for your poem it really makes a statement and is very impactual
the only suggestion I could make would be to drop some of the Can't I Stop's because its overwhelming repetition I think it could be just as impactual with the Can't I Stop's as a beginning for a paragraph. I hope this helps a lil bit and you keep writing everyday your poem is the first I have even commented on because it was so powerful of a statement keep up the writing I hope to see more. :)
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Re: can I just please stop....
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by pixie on
Sunday, 27th June 2004 @ 11:12:14 AM AEST
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awww hun if you ever need a chat....... very emotional piece
pixie xx |
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