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Piece Of Heaven
Contributed by
pixie
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Tuesday, 29th June 2004 @ 12:47:40 PM in AEST
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Youre my little piece of heaven,
A wonderful present that Ive been given,
Your love shines through the darkest cloud,
I never feel unhappy when youre around.
Youre the other half of me,
The trunk to my blossoming tree,
If I feel unsure or not quite ready,
You are my comfort, my big teddy.
Your cuddles are like gold,
But this perfection cant be sold,
The love we share is very exclusive,
Our evidence is genuine & conclusive.
When I need a bit of a lift,
You come along with your great gift,
The gift of love & kind words,
To others this language is unheard.
You give my soul a boost of energy,
Protect me from any sort of enemy,
Stand by me through lifes little trials,
Holding my hand tightly all the while.
Copyright ©
pixie
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2004-06-29 12:47:40]
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Re: Piece Of Heaven
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by SnowB on
Tuesday, 29th June 2004 @ 01:20:20 PM AEST
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This certainly does sound like a Piece Of Heaven...beautiful poem...
Lena |
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Re: Piece Of Heaven
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by allymp on
Tuesday, 29th June 2004 @ 01:31:02 PM AEST
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| wow, another great poem by you. i can really conect to your poety. good job. |
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Re: Piece Of Heaven
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by Kie-Kie on
Tuesday, 29th June 2004 @ 02:00:10 PM AEST
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| That was lovely *smiles* sounds like you really have found a piece of heaven....wish we could all be so lucky..........hold on to it tightly and pray others are as fortunate as you |
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Re: Piece Of Heaven
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by Jackee_line on
Tuesday, 29th June 2004 @ 02:55:23 PM AEST
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| Beautiful poem, i enjoy reading your poetry very much. Well done. |
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Re: Piece Of Heaven
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 29th June 2004 @ 03:19:37 PM AEST
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Such an uplifting poem, pixie.
Only one line bothered me;
"Our evidence is genuine & conclusive."
I didn't really find that it fit properly.. Perhaps you could use;
"Our secrets are shared, so love's not intrusive"
Just a suggestion on the 'ive' rhyme. You could probably pick a better one than me, because you know the subject matter alot more than I.
Keep writing. |
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Re: Piece Of Heaven
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 29th June 2004 @ 03:55:27 PM AEST
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| yes, this is sweet and happy - nice to see this from you! |
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Re: Piece Of Heaven
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by ladyfawn on
Tuesday, 29th June 2004 @ 08:52:18 PM AEST
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ohhhh adorably sweet!! i love the big teddy bear bit awwwwwww.... hugs n' love nessa
@->>->:- |
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Re: Piece Of Heaven
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by loveisendless on
Tuesday, 29th June 2004 @ 09:53:23 PM AEST
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IT SOUNDS LIKE THE KIND OF HEAVEN TO TAKE AWAY ANY OF YOUR HELL! WHAT AN AWESOME JOB YOU DID WITH THIS!! I REALLY LOVED IT ALOT PIXIE!!!
DAN!!!! |
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Re: Piece Of Heaven
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by venkat on
Wednesday, 30th June 2004 @ 01:34:15 AM AEST
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Aaaah..honey..this is very adorable write.
its true ..life needs boost of energy..best
of luck.. venkat
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Re: Piece Of Heaven
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by blueheart on
Wednesday, 30th June 2004 @ 08:42:54 AM AEST
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Piece of Heaven, such a fitting title for this one.
Beautiful. :) |
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