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Please Notice
Contributed by
screwup
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Tuesday, 29th June 2004 @ 01:06:45 PM in AEST
Topic:
Suicide
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look at this girl, lain on the floor
look at her wrist and the blood that drips
look at her face ans see the pain in her eyes
there were too many problems
so when she needed a friend no one was there
she screamed into their ears as they walked past
they moved on with there life, not noticing this girl or her warning,
not wanting to put up with her sad story
she sits there trying to imagine what living was like, because she can't remember
this girl, she is not alone, not alone in loving someone who doesn't notice
he doesn't see her pain anymore
he doesn't see that shes trying to say goodbye as they talk
or that shes trying to get that last look into his eyes
never to feel his touch again
she wonders if its okay to feel like dying
so many feel her pain, in different ways
this society is so *****
as no on knows what to do
as people take their lives not knowing what to choose, death or pain
many make this personal choice everyday
but this girl, she choose death
as she put the knife to her vein
she slid it down as the rush of life came through
she layed down and waited to die,
waited to escape, as she thought of him and her fate
she says she loves him more than anything as she slips into an unconsious state
her heart stops beating, as she slowly dies
there is nothing left of her soul to leave her body
he comes home to find her
and starts crying out in pain
as he holds her ice cold hands
with the blood on them
he kisses her and tells her that he loves her more than anything
but now she'll never know,
she died without knowing that someone finally noticed her
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2004-06-29 13:06:45]
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Re: Please Notice
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by pixie on
Tuesday, 29th June 2004 @ 01:48:50 PM AEST
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this is so sad, i used to feel so insignificant that no-one would notice me, but I now realise that people were noticing me m but I was shutting them out
great expression,
pixie xx |
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Re: Please Notice
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by TheReturnOfx7 on
Tuesday, 29th June 2004 @ 03:07:53 PM AEST
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| oh wow....so sad and tragic.....beautiful write |
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Re: Please Notice
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by wakegurl77 on
Tuesday, 29th June 2004 @ 04:46:00 PM AEST
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its amazing so true to so many people who have a habit of overlooking the people that truely love them because they are so filled with doubt and it so hard to save them from themselves
amazing write |
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Re: Please Notice
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by im_sory_i_cant_be_perfect on
Tuesday, 29th June 2004 @ 06:11:52 PM AEST
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i'm trying to get through the same thing now
beautiful write i loved it |
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Re: Please Notice
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by kidpoet_213 on
Tuesday, 29th June 2004 @ 11:46:39 PM AEST
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Deanna...
Truly amazing... it reminds me of too many young ppl today... who think that no one cares... no loves them... b/c of one thing or another... but someone does care... if they'll just seek Him!!!! He's there... always will be...
He loved them 1st b4 any of us.
an amazing write..
~Donna~ |
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