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Beast
Contributed by
ArdRi79
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Friday, 2nd July 2004 @ 11:59:10 AM in AEST
Topic:
DarkPoetry
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See a bloodlust in waiting eyes,
dead, staring in the sockets
of a contorted featureless face
as a flicking tongue slithers across green teeth
The entangling smell of putrid flesh
coils in your throat, twisting intestine
now choking and vomiting, blinded by tears
listening in darkness for shallow breath
a punch for rancid guts pulls back a fist of bowels
cold and squirming with decaying life
revealing an exposed rotting heart
slowly beating in anticipation
the sterilised cage rattles shut
but there's no one to hear
the beasts muffled screams as it dies pleading
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ArdRi79
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2004-07-02 11:59:10]
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Re: Beast
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by pixie on
Friday, 2nd July 2004 @ 12:01:45 PM AEST
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wow, that was dark.. I am sorry to hear about what happened to you *hugs you*
pixie xx |
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Re: Beast
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by C2C on
Friday, 2nd July 2004 @ 12:05:11 PM AEST
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I'm sorry about what happened to you. Stuff like that shouldn't be allowed to happen to anyone.
The imagery in your poem is very vivid and the point is well made. |
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Re: Beast
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by ArdRi79 on
Friday, 2nd July 2004 @ 12:27:02 PM AEST
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Thanks for the comments and hugs :)
I only accepted it recently it is a revelation to me that so much of my stuff was about THIS
Go repressed memories! |
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Re: Beast
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by Katie2008 on
Sunday, 8th August 2004 @ 12:52:23 PM AEST
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OH! That's terrible, [Not the poem, the poem was fantasic...] but what your father did to you...I hope you're doing alright. *hugs* It takes a very brave person to be able to write about these kinds of things, I have a lot of respect for you. Best of luck! This was so wonderfully written, by the way....wonderful imagery. 5/5
Katie |
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