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another ode
Contributed by
Jan_Oskar_Hansen
on
Wednesday, 23rd October 2002 @ 10:00:00 AM in AEST
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Another Ode.
For you Ill travel a thousand
light years but impatience is
my enemy that never stops to
inhale the fragrance of a lemon
tree. You are not what Im, you
are the serene moon playing
second string to master sun.
Two different roads we walked
till we met at a cross road, now
Im the shadow that cast a spell
upon you and disturbs your dreams;
you shall be unwillingly faithful
to me and never love another
man till you are a shadow too.
Copyright ©
Jan_Oskar_Hansen
... [
2002-10-23 10:00:00]
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Re: another ode
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by Butterat_Zool on
Wednesday, 23rd October 2002 @ 11:37:59 AM AEST
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| I really liked the first stanza... The lemon tree reference makes a great metaphor... But i got kinda lost in the second stanza... It reads like you love this person but then you pass off to them this curse of being "a shadow." I dunno. BZ |
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