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Beautiful Lie
Contributed by
blueheart
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Tuesday, 6th July 2004 @ 11:06:08 PM in AEST
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Filtered illusions woven with ease,
Moulding a naive mind with belief,
Platonic bond I thought to arise,
Emotions begin to seep through the lies.
Words of assurance I sought to receive,
Sensibility barely retrieved,
Focused vision withered by distraction,
Wallowing in impeccable creation.
Meticulous construction of blatant fibs,
Each served upon to gratify dreams,
Impending joy thought to remain,
Perfect surface stained again.
Falling into his alluring grace,
Composure gained, soon to decay,
Implausible story, kept so alive,
Betrayed by their beautiful lie.
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Re: Beautiful Lie
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by arden on
Tuesday, 6th July 2004 @ 11:15:42 PM AEST
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powerful poem. i liked it. a great use of wording and the rhyme was nice.
a really good poem. well done.
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Re: Beautiful Lie
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by faith_my_eyes on
Tuesday, 6th July 2004 @ 11:18:24 PM AEST
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| impeccable poem |
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Re: Beautiful Lie
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by faith_my_eyes on
Tuesday, 6th July 2004 @ 11:21:16 PM AEST
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| i meant to add it has a great flow and the description was wonderful |
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Re: Beautiful Lie
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by venkat on
Wednesday, 7th July 2004 @ 12:11:17 AM AEST
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| It is amazing write .. nicely rhymed well wrapped..venkat |
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Re: Beautiful Lie
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by shelby on
Wednesday, 7th July 2004 @ 01:14:11 AM AEST
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ohhhhhh this captured me nocely done and you told the story well betrayed by their beautiful lie
OUCH I know this all to well
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Re: Beautiful Lie
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by Lia on
Wednesday, 7th July 2004 @ 01:23:24 AM AEST
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| A lie told in the belief of protection is still a lie..funny how that is forgotten so often |
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Re: Beautiful Lie
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by mountainhigh on
Wednesday, 7th July 2004 @ 03:57:31 AM AEST
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Yes, that beautiful lie, or is it our own sight that is caught out of focus because we do wish to believe in such a fairytale....
Wonderful poem.
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Re: Beautiful Lie
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by pixie on
Wednesday, 7th July 2004 @ 11:12:13 AM AEST
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Hmmm great flow, a true write of brilliance
pixie xx |
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Re: Beautiful Lie
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by emystar on
Friday, 9th July 2004 @ 04:36:22 AM AEST
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All lies look beautifull at first.
Very well done.
I can certainly relate in ways.
luv, huggs,
emy |
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Re: Beautiful Lie
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by ladyfawn on
Saturday, 10th July 2004 @ 02:41:49 AM AEST
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beautifully written, hanna, from a personal level, i am with chris on the fairytale part, but i am sometimes the opposite as i am too honest to a fault, but i would rather someone dislike me for being and saying as i believe then be untruthful; to me that is far more unkind:) hugs n' love nessa
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Re: Beautiful Lie
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by RobertKilpatrick on
Saturday, 10th July 2004 @ 02:49:44 AM AEST
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| Wo a lot going on here ... Great use of words .. Cool write.. |
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Re: Beautiful Lie
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by wray on
Sunday, 11th July 2004 @ 04:53:18 AM AEST
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| This reminded me of one of my friends who has this compulsive lying complex thingy, except rather than lying to make others happy she lies to herself to make herself happy. Anyway I could read a lot of that in your poem (unless I totally misunderstood your words and I'm just deluding myself). |
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Re: Beautiful Lie
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by Rakerman1999 on
Sunday, 11th July 2004 @ 10:32:47 AM AEST
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Hanna, your ways of expression amaze me.
" betrayed by their beautiful lie."
So very sad yet so very well written,
Roses
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Re: Beautiful Lie
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by lovingcritters on
Sunday, 11th July 2004 @ 09:36:42 PM AEST
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Good for you Hanna
Now you are to them for sure.
Be very careful........for the world is full them!
They desire to do one thing.......that is pull your strings.....for their own selfish needs!
This is a wonderful poem. Your word mastery amazes me!
Marvelous
consue |
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Re: Beautiful Lie
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by Silent-No-More on
Sunday, 11th July 2004 @ 10:09:01 PM AEST
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Perfect surface stained again.
It is hard to see marks on the surface sometimes... we close our eyes to them, wanting perfection. When, in a moment of horrid reality, the stains reveal themselves to us - it is awful. But honestly, they were there the whole time and would have been whether we saw them or not.
This piece saddens me.... not because of the lie (there will always be liars) but because of the guilt that seems to have bled into this write. I see no cause for guilt. You tried. THEY failed.
*hugs and love*
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Re: Beautiful Lie
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by Soulless on
Monday, 26th July 2004 @ 11:32:50 AM AEST
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The title really lurred me into reading this pieces and then as I read on the poem held on stronger. I loved this, breathtaking. I also love the view point.
Kisses,
~Brooke~ |
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