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Why do you do this?
Contributed by
MDodgen
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Wednesday, 7th July 2004 @ 10:50:25 AM in AEST
Topic:
SadPoetry
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plastic tubes
monitors beeping
eyes closed
hearts breaking
mom sobbing
prayers flowing
breathe catching
lungs constricting
pulse quick
anxiety high
hands shaking
thoughts fleeing
flowers delivered
worry unconfined
why do you do this?
why don't you care?
don't you see how
much you matter?
why do you take us here?
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MDodgen
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2004-07-07 10:50:25]
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Re: Why do you do this?
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by pixie on
Wednesday, 7th July 2004 @ 10:55:55 AM AEST
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Awww Melenie, I am so sorry *hugs you*
hope your sister makes a quick recovery..... very raw and emotional write,
love and hugs
pixie xx |
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Re: Why do you do this?
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by Gentledove on
Wednesday, 7th July 2004 @ 12:05:30 PM AEST
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A very sad write. I hope your sister will be ok and she will see how very much this hurt the family and how much you all love her.
Gentledove |
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Re: Why do you do this?
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by carmen_queasy on
Wednesday, 7th July 2004 @ 02:39:58 PM AEST
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| That was beautiful, I like the structure of it. I hope your sister gets well. |
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Re: Why do you do this?
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by holderofthestone on
Thursday, 8th July 2004 @ 12:53:20 AM AEST
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| I know how much you care for your sister, just try to be there for here when she is ready to make the change. that will make a big difference for her. great poem I know what your going through. |
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Re: Why do you do this?
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by Silent-No-More on
Monday, 12th July 2004 @ 07:54:05 PM AEST
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Oh, Mel - such terrible news! My heart goes out to you and your family - and mostly, to your sister. I do hope that health and happiness are just around the corner for her.
Your poem is excellent... it reads as if it was written in a state of shock, in the midst of great pain - which, unfortunately, makes sense here. You made my heart sink with this one.
Extra hugs,
SNM |
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