|
 Menu
|
|
|
|
|
Social
|
|
|
|
|
My Boo
Contributed by
shrunkin_fool34142316
on
Thursday, 15th July 2004 @ 11:48:30 PM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
|
I don't know what to do
I'm so lost without my boo
Missing you is losing me
Why can't I just let these feelings be
All I do is sleep and cry
I still can't seem to say goodbye
Missing you with every moment
This happens to frequent
I cry sitting in a dark corner
It seems that I only get dumber
Wondering what your doing evrey moment of every day
If I saw you what would you say
It's like I'm lost deep within
But being with you seems like a sin
I can't get over you
It's like a permenat flu
But I must say just so you know I do love you
Now I must go for I need a tissue
Copyright ©
shrunkin_fool34142316
... [
2004-07-15 23:48:30]
(Date/Time posted on
site)
Advertisments:
|
|
|
|
|
|
Sorry, comments are no longer allowed for anonymous, please register for a free membership to access this feature and more
|
|
All comments are owned by the poster. Your Poetry
Dot Com is not responsible for the content of any
comment.
That said, if you find an offensive comment, please
contact via the FeedBack Form with details, including poem title
etc.
|
|
|
Re: My Boo
(User Rating: 1 )
by HellsLibrarian on
Thursday, 15th July 2004 @ 11:54:03 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
| Well, as rhyming poems go, it's not the best I've ever read, but it's definitely not the worst, either. The ending was cute, and yet let the reader feel your pain. Who knew, "you" rhymes with "tissue?" |
|
|
Re: My Boo
(User Rating: 1 )
by drummerchic18 on
Thursday, 15th July 2004 @ 11:59:47 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
| I agree...It's cute...I usually go for the grusome poems, but this is cute. The Rhyming scheme was very creative..I couldn't do that if I tried. Whatever comes...comes...you know. good Job |
|
|
Re: My Boo
(User Rating: 1 )
by Former_Member on
Friday, 16th July 2004 @ 04:02:45 AM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
I'll generally agree with HL, but add that I would have liked you to elaborate more on what your 'Boo' actually is. Fortunately, I'm versed in U.S. slang (and have heard that tune with Kelly & Nelly) and understand what it refers to. Others who haven't, wouldn't get it, i'm sure . . .
'Frequent', is a kind of slang which also seems slightly forced, but, overall, its a nice sentiment to express.
Keep writing. |
|
|
Re: My Boo
(User Rating: 1 )
by pixie on
Friday, 16th July 2004 @ 04:45:59 AM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
awwww cute poem, good write, will become great with practise, you have great potential..
pixie xx |
|
|
Re: My Boo
(User Rating: 1 )
by Stoney1 on
Friday, 16th July 2004 @ 06:51:03 AM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
So what is a "boo"? Don't leave us in suspense!
Stoney |
|
|
Re: My Boo
(User Rating: 1 )
by lostinmyself on
Friday, 16th July 2004 @ 09:17:10 AM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
I have to agree with the others,
the rhyming was not the best,
but also alot better than many i have seen.
Brilliant for the first time.
The word 'Boo' actually means 'Little woman'
I have a boo. lol.
Its what i always called her.
She's a good friend of mine.
I love the end, brilliant.
I would never expect You and tissue to go together.
Great poem, phil |
|
|
|
· 
Poetry
Site Help
Members
Areas
Reference
Search
Top
Others
