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Falling
Contributed by
baronhawk
on
Friday, 16th July 2004 @ 03:40:10 PM in AEST
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I have slipped
slip! slip! slip!
on the deluge,
I have tripped
trip! trip! trip!
on subterfuge,
I am falling
fall! fall! fall!
into the pit,
I am running
run! run! run!
from the heat,
I am demanding
mine! mine! mine!
my just dues,
I am receiving
none! none! none!
but life's refuse,
I have gone
gone! gone! gone!
beyond all hope,
I have found
found! found! found!
my farewell stroke,
I am falling
down! down! down!
into the deeps,
I am sinking
sink! sink! sink!
to that blissful sleep.
Copyright ©
baronhawk
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2004-07-16 15:40:10]
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Re: Falling
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by Fionndruinne on
Friday, 16th July 2004 @ 03:58:05 PM AEST
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Great message. Interesting format. I haven't seen anything quite like this before. Excellent piece.
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Re: Falling
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by lovingcritters on
Saturday, 17th July 2004 @ 12:14:18 AM AEST
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Baronhawk........I didn't even know you were back!
Wonderful.........will have to catch up with you!
This is very interesting! I like the way you laid this one out........goes along with the theme
Great Work!
love
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Re: Falling
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by venkat on
Saturday, 17th July 2004 @ 01:38:57 AM AEST
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| Well written my dear dancer..atlast we find that blissful sleep..venkat |
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Re: Falling
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by Avarice_Riot on
Sunday, 18th July 2004 @ 02:35:18 AM AEST
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| Love the style in which you presented this poem, which is nothing short of magnificient. It's like reading children's poetry but with a deep meaning behind it. Well done. |
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