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Moonlit Waterfall
Contributed by
silent_wolf_tear
on
Saturday, 17th July 2004 @ 02:07:40 AM in AEST
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The wind blows so softly
Theres rain mist in the air
The moonlight above me
Shines away the dispair.
The cool calming winds
Blows back my hair
I look towards the mountains
Theres no one anywhere.
Under the moonlit waterfall, lies the endless stream
That takes you far away, to the dreams that lie between
I dont know if Ill make it there, its quite far away.
But I know Ill see you there, somehow, someday
I look towards the moon
The light shines down on me
I see my best friend
(You) Is this a dream?
For it has been years
Since I seen you last
A tragic accident
That I left burried in the past!
Under the moonlit waterfall, lies the endless stream
That takes you far away, to the dreams that lie between
I dont know if Ill make it there, its quite far away.
But I know Ill see you there, somehow, someday
Everything is okay
(I tell myself)
itll be okay
(should I trust myself?)
Under the moonlit waterfall, lies the endless stream
That takes you far away, to the dreams that lie between
I dont know if Ill make it there, its quite far away.
But I know Ill see you there, somehow, someday
The wind blew so softly
The smell of rain in the air
Undernieth the moonlit waterfall
Ill lose this dispare.
Over the mountains
Theres no one I can see
No one can help you
Help me find these dreams
Under the moonlit waterfall, lies the endless stream
That takes you far away, to the dreams that lie between
I dont know if Ill make it there, its quite far away.
But I know Ill see you there, somehow, some
Under the moonlit waterfall, lies the endless stream
That takes you far away, to the dreams that lie between
I dont know if Ill make it there, its quite far away.
But I know Ill see you there, somehow, someday
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2004-07-17 02:07:40]
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Re: Moonlit Waterfall
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by Jenni_K on
Saturday, 17th July 2004 @ 02:32:07 AM AEST
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OMG!! This is absolutely beautiful..... sadly so... but none the less.... I can almost hear it being sung......
Great work!!!
Jenni |
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Re: Moonlit Waterfall
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by Avarice_Riot on
Saturday, 17th July 2004 @ 03:07:52 AM AEST
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| Ooh I very much enjoyed reading this, the imagery is very beautiful and lends a tragic air to the poem...well done, this is a great write. |
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Re: Moonlit Waterfall
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by Stoney1 on
Saturday, 17th July 2004 @ 10:33:41 AM AEST
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First of all, I think the poem is beautiful,
or did you write it as a song? If it's indeed
a poem, that you need to do some editing.
The repeating verse is a chorus and can
belong there if it's a song. But if it's a poem,
then it's overdone. I found myself skipping
over the repeats.
Also, it wouldn't hurt to run it through a spell
checker.
It's a nice piece of work, and worth the extra
effort to polish it.
Stoney
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