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Dad
Contributed by
hrpuffnstuff
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Saturday, 17th July 2004 @ 06:42:54 AM in AEST
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You are the devil incarnate
You spew your evil sayings like sick
You used such powerful words
"I do this because i love you"
And I believed you
You are the devil incarnate
Your eyes you use to hypnotise
You pleaded with such tugging words
"Do you love me?"
And I trusted you
You are the Devil incarnate
You used your fork to separate me
From my mum and my childhood
"I do this because i love you"
And I believed you
You are the Devil incarnate
You used terror to control me
You used such threatening words
"Youll kill your mum, send me to jail"
And I kept quiet
You are the Devil incarnate
You are evil, you are sick
All these years you have taunted me
"It was 50-50, you're to blame"
Now I dont believe you
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Re: Dad
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by Stitch on
Saturday, 17th July 2004 @ 06:59:35 AM AEST
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WOAH! This is major, deep stuff, and an excellent first outing. Keep it up.
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Re: Dad
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by Archie on
Saturday, 17th July 2004 @ 07:26:17 AM AEST
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| Wow! I have felt like that before but have not been able to express it that way. I hope things work out for you and I also hope that you do not blame God for what actions your dad has done. |
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Re: Dad
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by hooray_its_jen on
Saturday, 17th July 2004 @ 08:08:49 AM AEST
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Stitch already said what I was going to say. At least part of it....Awesome poem, my friend! I don't think I've seen you around here before, are you new? I would love to keep reading your work. You can send me a message if you need anything (I know I sent about five when I first came here trying to figure out exactly what the forums were all about....*blushes*). Welcome to the site!
Blessings
Love, Jenna |
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Re: Dad
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by emeraldeyes on
Saturday, 17th July 2004 @ 08:16:13 AM AEST
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| good poem...definately feel some strong emotions!! I can relate... |
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Re: Dad
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by Stoney1 on
Saturday, 17th July 2004 @ 10:09:13 AM AEST
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You're not Ian Paisley's kid are you?
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Re: Dad
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by pixie on
Saturday, 17th July 2004 @ 10:40:20 AM AEST
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this is such a powerful write, sorry to hear about this *hugs you* keep em coming,,
pixie xx |
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Re: Dad
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by Jenni_K on
Saturday, 17th July 2004 @ 10:55:32 AM AEST
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Warm welcome to YPDC.... great emotions written wonderfully...... Hope to read more of your work...
Jenni |
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Re: Dad
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 18th July 2004 @ 09:40:50 AM AEST
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As for Archie's comment, I would find it hard not to blame God for what I understand to be the underlying atrocities perpetrated by your father, simply because he used God's authority to hide his crimes. That is despicable. Utterly so.
As for stoney1's comment - well, that's just insensitive and mindless - idiotic even.
My comment? Part incredulity that you managed to write something like this, and part anger that someone is capable of abuse of both a position of authority, and one's own children.
Needless to say I think its excellent, yet harrowing. Well done and welcome again - please excuse my earlier mindlessness- I'm hungover (again).
Thanks for sharing. |
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Re: Dad
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by Silent-No-More on
Sunday, 18th July 2004 @ 12:13:06 PM AEST
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Bravo! and welcome to YPDC! This is an amazing piece. What an introduction! It is as if you threw open the YPDC door and stepped in with a shout of "Ladies and Gentlemen - I HAVE ARRIVED".
I am staggered by the emotion in this. It is seriously powerful and quite heartwrenching. I join the others in thanking you for sharing it.
Looking forward to reading more of your work,
SNM
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Re: Dad
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by katyqueen35 on
Monday, 19th July 2004 @ 06:24:45 AM AEST
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| Wow very powerful written piece.... |
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