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Fears
Contributed by
lifefliesby
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Saturday, 17th July 2004 @ 02:17:58 PM in AEST
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This pain in me
It burns like fire
Sacalding heat
As I grow tired
I drop to a knee
As I jerk my head
The pain in seeks
Is how it's lead
It hurts and burns
Down to my soul
Just as hot
As burning coal
It tears at me
And I fall apart
At the end o' the bed
Sits the unstable chart
I know it's coming
And nearly here
For this is all
My greatest fear
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Re: Fears
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by C2C on
Saturday, 17th July 2004 @ 02:22:40 PM AEST
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This poem makes me believe the greatest fear is some sort of illness or death. Especially the "unstable chart" at the end of the bed. Remins me of a hospital bed.
It's a great poem because you have to think about it, lots of depth. I sincerely hope everything works out for you.
~Tuesday~ |
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Re: Fears
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by liquidsunshine on
Saturday, 17th July 2004 @ 02:25:22 PM AEST
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Now, I know you really well and I'm having trouble with this one's meaning.
This is a really good poem, it's full of symbols and passion.
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but I think we need to talk.
Love always,
Chelsea |
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Re: Fears
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by Tarukar on
Wednesday, 28th July 2004 @ 09:14:59 PM AEST
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| Unless you are really talked about a hospital bed as someone suggested, the unstable chart line, that kind of feels like a forced rhyme to me. I'm sure your forehead could think of a substitue. |
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Re: Fears
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by eatfresh22 on
Thursday, 4th November 2004 @ 04:46:03 PM AEST
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Yes, quite full of passion and emotion. I like the short, choppy lines.
~Carrie~ |
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Re: Fears
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by logdogs on
Friday, 1st August 2008 @ 08:46:26 PM AEST
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| its good and short and understandable to everyone who has a fear. |
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