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Ok, Not All Right
Contributed by
Elocin
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Monday, 19th July 2004 @ 12:31:13 AM in AEST
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Ok, not all right
Almost but not quite
I see but Im blind
Im blind but with sight
I smile but Im sad
Im good but Im bad
Dont want what I got
But crave what I had
Im right but Im wrong
Im weak but Im strong
I so love my life
But soon itll be gone
I love but I hate
Destroy and create
I must change the world
Before its too late
Impulsive but meek
Awake but Im sleep
Though my eyes are dry
Inside I still weep
Ok, not all right
Almost but not quite
A lone warrior
But still I must fight
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Elocin
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2004-07-19 00:31:13]
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Re: Ok, Not All Right
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by Black13 on
Monday, 19th July 2004 @ 12:37:46 AM AEST
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I rather liked this one.
I know that feeling and you did a wonderful job writing it out.
Some good wording in this one. |
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Re: Ok, Not All Right
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by Dusty on
Monday, 19th July 2004 @ 12:44:14 AM AEST
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| I liked this one alot. It has a certain rythm(Sp?) Cool write, and I can relate.
~Dusty~ |
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Re: Ok, Not All Right
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by shelby on
Monday, 19th July 2004 @ 01:43:53 AM AEST
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enjoyable write you captured the essance of frustrations well with this I also relate!!
Michelle |
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Re: Ok, Not All Right
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 19th July 2004 @ 06:08:26 AM AEST
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Sharp, punchy write. Brevity is the soul of wit, as some say, and you've captured your emotions very well here, with many, varied images.
Welcome to YPDC.
Thanks for sharing this one. |
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