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Detached From You
Contributed by
blueheart
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Monday, 19th July 2004 @ 09:02:03 PM in AEST
Topic:
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Hovering about in your questions,
Encompassed between delusional walls,
Quizzical thoughts run their race,
You wonder why I'm leaving it all.
Encased within your scornful sense,
Vicious breaths emanate for thrills,
And still surprise creeps upon you,
When these barricades I build.
Similar blood flows within our veins,
And yet our chasms remain wide open,
Supposed cousins but emotional strangers,
Childhood solidarity now broken.
An apology comforts, it never heals,
I'm leaving towards respect and truth,
The peace I crave enshrouds my head,
I'm detaching myself from you.
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blueheart
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2004-07-19 21:02:03]
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Re: Detached From You
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 19th July 2004 @ 09:23:10 PM AEST
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| Very expressive. Interesting, because I just wrote something like the polar opposite of this. |
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Re: Detached From You
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by venkat on
Tuesday, 20th July 2004 @ 12:45:07 AM AEST
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Very expressive and emotionally captivating..
venkat |
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Re: Detached From You
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by evilfairy on
Tuesday, 20th July 2004 @ 01:03:39 AM AEST
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love this line "I'm leaving towards respect and truth"
quite smitten with the whole last verse actually.
powerfully written - can see such strength behind the words |
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Re: Detached From You
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by ladyfawn on
Tuesday, 20th July 2004 @ 01:11:11 AM AEST
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awww so sad hanna, but you must do what you must, im here if you'd like to talk, are you alright? big hugs n' love nessa
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Re: Detached From You
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by AspenGlow on
Tuesday, 20th July 2004 @ 03:22:02 AM AEST
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The empty nest is one that comes when its time to move on, one builds one's own nests as w move on.
Very good write, thanks for sharing. |
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Re: Detached From You
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by pixie on
Tuesday, 20th July 2004 @ 06:32:17 AM AEST
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a very captivating write Blueheart. great write, *hugs you*
pixie xx |
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Re: Detached From You
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 20th July 2004 @ 03:26:49 PM AEST
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Sad yet entrancing words. I like the flow and rhythm. Such a poetic verse.
Angel always...joni |
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Re: Detached From You
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by PumpkinPie on
Wednesday, 21st July 2004 @ 11:42:31 PM AEST
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Exquisite write blueheart,might I also add that you define every emotion felt in me these past few weeks with your verse:"An apology comforts,it never heals",how well said and so very true.
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Re: Detached From You
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by Soulless on
Monday, 26th July 2004 @ 11:30:03 AM AEST
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Another beautiful write. I love devouring your words up. I especially loved the last stanza, that really caught me. Although the whole piece was wonderful
Kisses,
~Brooke~ |
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