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Maybe
Contributed by
LoserLottie
on
Friday, 23rd July 2004 @ 02:35:46 PM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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Maybe one day Ill fly away,
And when I come back,
Ill be beautiful,
Just like you.
Maybe one day Ill fall asleep,
And when I wake up,
My eyes will shine,
Just like yours.
Maybe one day Ill close the door,
And when I open it again,
My hair will be golden like the sun,
Just like yours.
Maybe one day Ill turn away,
And when I look back,
My skin will glow,
Just like yours.
Maybe one day Ill fly away,
And when I come back,
You'll be beautiful,
Just like me.
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LoserLottie
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2004-07-23 14:35:46]
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Re: Maybe
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by faith_my_eyes on
Friday, 23rd July 2004 @ 03:11:01 PM AEST
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| nice write- I like the twist at the end, the acknowledgement of inner beauty over outer beauty |
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Re: Maybe
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 23rd July 2004 @ 05:18:58 PM AEST
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I like that strong sense of self-esteem that appeared at the end of the poem, showing that you realize it take more than just outer beauty to be really beautiful. Great write here.
Rita |
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