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Train Of Thought
Contributed by
pvd
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Friday, 23rd July 2004 @ 04:40:40 PM in AEST
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When I boarded the express,
Lao Tsu punched my ticket
Jesus, Krishna, and Buddha,
were sitting, playing cards.
Poker? I asked
Lao Tsu said,
No! It is the game
that can not be named
it is the eternal game
What?
The nameless is the beginning
of heaven and earth.
God, Jesus chimed in,
Were playing God.
And who is God? I asked.
I am the three replied in unison.
Moses and Mohammed were watching.
And what about you? I asked.
We dont gamble. they answered.
They were only conductors,
so I asked Who is the engineer?
Who is driving this train?
You are, was their reply.
Where am I going?
The tracks are laid,
follow the signals.
I got off the train
Im in no hurry
so I think Ill walk.
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pvd
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2004-07-23 16:40:40]
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Re: Train Of Thought
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 23rd July 2004 @ 05:14:40 PM AEST
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Extremely unique. It appears like a joke written in poetry format. I am not quite sure my reaction to this one. It drew me back for a second read but I am still unsettled with it.
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Re: Train Of Thought
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by wray on
Saturday, 24th July 2004 @ 09:52:23 AM AEST
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| LoL this is awesome, and definitely needs a second perusal to fully understand. Cleverly written words - I realised as soon as I picked up the "playing God" thing that this poem would be an interesting metaphorical experience. What I like is that your metaphors aren't so distorted and shrouded in mystery that they can't be easily understood; it's a nice change from other poems out there. The simplicity of your technique also suits the lighthearted tone (thank God, npi, for the latter, we need more literature like this). All in all a nice, humorous read. Kudos for the original concept too. |
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