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Quiet Iconoclasts
Contributed by
Silent-No-More
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Saturday, 24th July 2004 @ 10:26:15 PM in AEST
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Eighty eight years between us
We arrive first in a Pennsylvania town
On a quiet October day
Without the bother of excitement
Years pass, after daughter arrives
We move along the streets of Hartford
Slowing making our way to work
No longer invisible at thirty six
A birth announcement in metapoetry
Followed then by silence
Years spent in solitary focus
Toiling away in business like fashion
A vice president sitting
In a gray room, surrounded
By colors that no one can hear
Until the silence is shattered
By a mind too full with thought
And a pen too heavy with ink
By necessity, it again begins to flow
As an addict returning to drug
Or the birds to the South in winter
Without expectation that it would
Be anything but the gentle musing
Of a working mind
A mind, full and rich as it were
But decidedly unimportant to itself
Pointing to the others as vital
Disguising itself in common words
Placed, painfully, atop themselves
As oil paint over an original masterpiece
And as the mind raced
The words fell out onto the page
With very, very little ado at all
But, Oh! In the midst of that quiet act
How furiously the heart was beating
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Silent-No-More
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Re: Quiet Iconoclasts
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 24th July 2004 @ 11:56:39 PM AEST
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And it is a beautiful reason for the heart to race and the spirit to rise and the mind to think. This is a wonderful piece of work, SNM. I know this feeling well. I never really wrote until right before I retired and discovered a way to release so many years of life. It is my natural high.
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Sunday, 25th July 2004 @ 12:02:49 AM AEST
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And it is a beautiful reason for the heart to race and the spirit to rise and the mind to think. This is a wonderful piece of work, SNM. I know this feeling well. I never really wrote until right before I retired and discovered a way to release so many years of life. It is my natural high.
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Re: Quiet Iconoclasts
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 25th July 2004 @ 02:45:23 PM AEST
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But, Oh! In the midst of that quiet act
How furiously the heart was beating
w
This was terrific all the ay through but the ending especially struck me - simply fabulous write.
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Re: Quiet Iconoclasts
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by venkat on
Monday, 26th July 2004 @ 01:31:15 AM AEST
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| this is like gentle musing of a mind with rich poetic emotions..:-) venkat |
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Re: Quiet Iconoclasts
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by poetryman30 on
Monday, 26th July 2004 @ 09:41:25 AM AEST
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Wooow....what an excellent poet you are....I look at my drivellings and compare them to something like this and I see all of my shortcomings....
This is a masterful piece....truly inspiring.
Very well done...PM30 |
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Re: Quiet Iconoclasts
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by pvd on
Monday, 26th July 2004 @ 10:27:10 AM AEST
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You impress me with not only this poem (which is one of the best I have come across lately,) but also your knowledge of Wallace Stevens, who I quote now,
“The poem goes from the poet’s gibberish to
The gibberish of the vulgate and back again.”
Aah, the pressure of poetry isn't it grand!!
PVD
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Re: Quiet Iconoclasts
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by blueheart on
Monday, 26th July 2004 @ 08:47:37 PM AEST
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You mixed your knowledge and emotions to create this superb piece.
Very well written. |
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Re: Quiet Iconoclasts
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 27th July 2004 @ 01:29:34 PM AEST
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Your cleverness and intelligence shows through on this one, mixed with your strong emotions you have created a wonderful piece!
Very well done SNM! |
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Re: Quiet Iconoclasts
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by ShadowDaughter on
Wednesday, 28th July 2004 @ 01:58:26 PM AEST
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Love it! Love it, love it, love it. I can't say it enough ^^. Yes, most definitely "decidedly different", but entirely in a good --fantastic-- way. And those last two lines just say it all . . . bravo, SNM, bravo!
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Re: Quiet Iconoclasts
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by emystar on
Thursday, 29th July 2004 @ 04:52:16 AM AEST
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Beautifully said.
Great write.
huggs, smiles,
emy |
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Re: Quiet Iconoclasts
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by Sagacious on
Monday, 2nd August 2004 @ 10:55:47 PM AEST
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Thank you, SNM, for the warm welcome you extended to me. And now, I must return your praise--for this is a highly mature work, much deserving of it. The poem's heart and soul are contained in the following six lines:
...A mind, full and rich as it were
But decidedly unimportant to itself
Pointing to the others as vital
Disguising itself in common words
Placed, painfully, atop themselves
As oil paint over an original masterpiece
Together with the final couplet, these lines have all the hallmarks of great writing: humility, purpose, passion, and conciseness. That which comes before is a great set-up, establishing context with a quiet reverence toward the subject. Yet, the aforementioned lines carry the entirety to grand poetic heights which do the artform justice.
On behalf of all the "furiously beating" hearts with whom we share our curious literary craving: Thank You! -KAC- |
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Re: Quiet Iconoclasts
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by Elena on
Wednesday, 22nd September 2004 @ 01:42:33 AM AEST
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Beautifully written, well thought-out, freely flowing and totally inspiring.
E |
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Re: Quiet Iconoclasts
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 19th May 2006 @ 12:38:08 AM AEST
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Ah, such a nice poem about a poetic attorney. Thank you, that was very enjoyable.
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Re: Quiet Iconoclasts
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 19th May 2006 @ 12:40:51 AM AEST
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Oops, I actually meant to say.
Ah, such a nice poem about a poetic attorney and you. Thank you, that was very enjoyable.
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