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Soda Pop
Contributed by
norticus
on
Monday, 28th October 2002 @ 09:45:00 AM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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I'm liquid. Without form.
You chill me
I want to be warm
My sweetness you suck away
My world's tiny bubbles every day
I'm shaking. So cold.
You open me up.
I explode.
You drain me til there's nothing more
Then go get another from the store.
I'm empty. Totally flat.
You toss me
You didn't look back.
Nothing's left for me to do
I'm just the trash now that you threw.
jz
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2002-10-28 09:45:00]
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Re: Soda Pop
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by GEQUETSCHT on
Monday, 28th October 2002 @ 11:17:46 AM AEST
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| lol fizzled... i like this one |
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Re: Soda Pop
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by OreO on
Monday, 28th October 2002 @ 01:20:50 PM AEST
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This is so true for some
people. It's sad when someone
treats a person this way and then
tosses them away like trash.
Very cute poem, i like this one
alot, Keep em' coming
.::´¯`·..· OreO·..·´¯`::.
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Re: Soda Pop
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by DreamWeaver on
Monday, 28th October 2002 @ 03:25:50 PM AEST
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| I like this poem ... well written! |
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Re: Soda Pop
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by Daniela_Maria_Violin on
Tuesday, 29th October 2002 @ 06:16:14 AM AEST
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| cute write... something tells me its about alot more than soda pop though... I like it |
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Re: Soda Pop
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by Kiz on
Saturday, 2nd November 2002 @ 09:06:52 PM AEST
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not sure about the title. Great poem babe, two dimesions, two meanings. Amusing yet you can relate it to love. Cleverly written!
Kiz's scale: 4.76 |
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Re: Soda Pop
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by spaded on
Wednesday, 13th November 2002 @ 01:08:20 PM AEST
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| good comparison work... |
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Re: Soda Pop
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by darkeyedman on
Sunday, 24th November 2002 @ 10:24:41 PM AEST
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| loved it. really made me smile. |
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