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Hold me
Contributed by
feathercut
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Monday, 26th July 2004 @ 03:01:02 AM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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Hold me
i,
pick the scabs
scrape the surface,
screaming for whats underneath
the time,
glowing like a tv light
i am what i am beneath me
what is this?
lonely bright
i see you!
you dont see me
flourescent moon,
sell me quickly
never full and
hanging empty
Hold me up
Hold me up
Hold me up
hold me......
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2004-07-26 03:01:02]
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Re: Hold me
(User Rating: 1 )
by Former_Member on
Monday, 26th July 2004 @ 03:17:54 AM AEST
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The topic demarcation allows people browsing poems to find out a little more of the poem's meaning.
What does this one mean?
I get the impression that by your name, it is about cutting, or (of scabs) a return to self-harm in some way. I like the way you used the glow of a television's radioactivity / moon in association with the lonely effusiveness, to allude to a reclusive, part-blind self-reference.
That's what I read (this time round), at any rate. I would have made a completely different kind of stab in total darkness, had I no topic (or if it were miscategorized) to go by.
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Re: Hold me
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 28th July 2004 @ 11:35:30 PM AEST
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you have a very unique style of writing, keep it up!
wildejohnny. |
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