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LOST the WAR
Contributed by
Alina
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Saturday, 31st July 2004 @ 10:33:22 PM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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Because there is nothing to care about
No one to love
The Sinful City is burning
And it wont be allright
Because I lay overdosing on the floor
I can hear your fearfull fright
They throw it in my face
They say it is all my fault
I'm not the one who asked to be born
I'm not the one who sought...
....A life so horrible
Of sinful sinners
Because the Sinful City is burning
It won't be allright
Because I lay overdosing on the floor
Today the City and I
LOST the WAR ....
Copyright ©
Alina
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2004-07-31 22:33:22]
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Re: LOST the WAR
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by ChinaRivera on
Saturday, 31st July 2004 @ 11:27:12 PM AEST
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Whaaaaaaaaaa? Im confused! Are you the sinful city thats burning, Because you lie overdosing on the floor? ;-q
You say:
"Theres no one to care about, no one to love!"
Love & Care about God! He's worth Loving and caring for. ;-)
Our bodys are Gods temple. Show care by not laying overdosing on the floor!
You didn't ask to be born into a life so horrible of sinful sinners.
THE REAL WAR HASN*T EVEN BEGAN YET!
and you joining the sinners way by overdosing on the floor.
Everytime i seen the line "overdosing on the floor" mixed with the other words of the poem. I just thought: "This poem is kind of contradictive!"
I got mixed feeling reading this.
this write is "aaaightt!"
I think you should've described at the start, what the poem is about more. Cause this is just confusing. its like you made a peanut butter and mayo sandwhich. Catching my drift. anyways much love to you! Peace. |
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Re: LOST the WAR
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by emystar on
Saturday, 31st July 2004 @ 11:31:30 PM AEST
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Well I hope-n-pray thast this iss jus writing.
Hope to hear from u again.
This sort of write breaks my heart.
luv, huggs, hopes, pryaer,
emystar@msn.com |
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