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On not going to Australia
Contributed by
reilt
on
Monday, 2nd August 2004 @ 04:25:07 PM in AEST
Topic:
oops
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I fear my wings were never tested
Too new, too fragile
And too unsure were the winds
That blew between us
To carry me to
I have lived, I have nestled
For this while
At a loss, at an end
I have loved
And I have lasted
Tasted bitter, laughed and cried.
I have remained
And never flown this familiar
I have not a great many of things.
I have not discovered continents
Or you
I have not trusted since
I have just wated
I have just changed
And I fear you have too.
I fear for both of us
To have differed
To have parted
To have diverted in paths
Never knowing
How we would
Just how we were
In the breath of our distance.
Copyright ©
reilt
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2004-08-02 16:25:07]
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Re: On not going to Australia
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by MomentInTime on
Monday, 2nd August 2004 @ 06:50:21 PM AEST
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Come on over to Oz anyway....
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Re: On not going to Australia
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 3rd August 2004 @ 05:16:00 AM AEST
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I'd like to go there someday. Your poem was full of regret/longing/sadness, which was expressed elegantly.
Thankyou for sharing it with us - perhaps you'll get there one day. |
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Re: On not going to Australia
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by Ina on
Saturday, 21st August 2004 @ 03:36:49 PM AEST
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so delicately emotional.
this line:
"I have not a great many of things."
i liked and diliked. I disliked it because it is very grammatically incorrect and that bugged me at first,but re reading it I felt like you intended it to be confusing, and all of a sudden I appreciated this little invalid sentence. this sentence could stand on it own.
yours
ina |
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