|
 Menu
|
|
|
|
|
Social
|
|
|
|
|
Paralysis
Contributed by
fredlost
on
Tuesday, 3rd August 2004 @ 03:06:26 AM in AEST
Topic:
LovePoetry
|
Static of spirit, static of mind,
A static position, trapped in time,
Afraid of movement, wrought with fear,
Of what could be not,
The elimination of a l dream dear,
Paralysed moments, opportunities lost,
Is that preferable, to the potential cost,
Inaction a perpetuation of anxiety,
To maintain a stilted vision of what I would see.
Copyright ©
fredlost
... [
2004-08-03 03:06:26]
(Date/Time posted on
site)
Advertisments:
|
|
|
|
|
|
Sorry, comments are no longer allowed for anonymous, please register for a free membership to access this feature and more
|
|
All comments are owned by the poster. Your Poetry
Dot Com is not responsible for the content of any
comment.
That said, if you find an offensive comment, please
contact via the FeedBack Form with details, including poem title
etc.
|
|
|
Re: Paralysis
(User Rating: 1 )
by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 3rd August 2004 @ 03:58:19 AM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
I'm not sure about some of the words/phrases you use, as they seem overcomplicated to me;
"stilted vision" & "The elimination of a l dream dear"
Yet, I still find your message resonant, as I too have experienced this state of mind.
Thanks for sharing, and welcome to YPDC. |
|
|
Re: Paralysis
(User Rating: 1 )
by fredlost on
Tuesday, 3rd August 2004 @ 04:51:41 AM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
Thanks for your comment. Whilst my phrasing may seem overcomplicated, it is simply a reflection of the manner in which I converse on paper, for better of worse. Further I hark back, to the scriblings of writers of yore, rather then the contempory preference of some for the 'simplistic'.
p.s I have found the answer to my previous question, if you lack comments....simply write your own. Pure unadulterated genius. |
|
|
Re: Paralysis
(User Rating: 1 )
by Jenni_K on
Tuesday, 3rd August 2004 @ 04:26:51 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
I can surely relate to this....in a simplier way, of course..:>)
Jenni |
|
|
Re: Paralysis
(User Rating: 1 )
by Jenni_K on
Tuesday, 3rd August 2004 @ 04:26:52 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
I can surely relate to this....in a simplier way, of course..:>)
Jenni |
|
|
|
· 
Poetry
Community
Members
Areas
Reference
Search
Top
Others
