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Dust 2 Dust
Contributed by
Delusions
on
Wednesday, 30th October 2002 @ 02:00:00 AM in AEST
Topic:
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Her hands, toward the sky
Her eyes looking,
searching,
for something thats real,
Life
Dry grass cutting her bare feet,
brown to red,
dust to dust,
Grief
Dreams of a lost soul,
Shattered
Body falling,
Rapidly,
vanishing into makebelieve.
Lying in a bath,
Still
Blood mixing with water,
Flowing,
Dying
Screaming inside.
Breathing, slower
Dreams,
coming true
Reality,
cutting deeper,
Cleaner
Dirty thoughts of fury,
The only way
Escape,
wanting to be free
Tears,
salty, sliding down one red cheek,
Eyes,
slowly closing,
pulling her down,
Drowning,
Taste,
her blood, choking her,
Heart,
stop,
A world of pain
Left behind
The path of freedom
Lays ahead...
Copyright ©
Delusions
... [
2002-10-30 02:00:00]
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Re: Dust 2 Dust
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by lil_angel on
Wednesday, 30th October 2002 @ 02:06:27 AM AEST
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| a great write! I can feel the emotions of this poem. |
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Re: Dust 2 Dust
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by OreO on
Wednesday, 30th October 2002 @ 03:07:04 AM AEST
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This is so sad
very deep poem
Keep em' coming
.::´¯`·..· OreO·..·´¯`::.
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Re: Dust 2 Dust
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by Broken_Skin on
Wednesday, 18th December 2002 @ 06:59:35 AM AEST
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i really like this
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Re: Dust 2 Dust
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by razorbladerose on
Tuesday, 29th April 2003 @ 08:36:11 AM AEST
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| I love the technique used in this write...the way you have used the ponctuation is brilliant! I think what stands out the most to me in this write, is the way you wrote it, which in turn gave me the ability to feel it....it made me see the imagery, and this is something i consider a little hard to do...to give the reader such clear imagery! Excellent!!! |
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Re: Dust 2 Dust
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by wyrd_faerie on
Tuesday, 15th July 2003 @ 12:34:45 PM AEST
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| this is incredible...i really, really love it...so sad... |
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Re: Dust 2 Dust
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by unforgiven on
Thursday, 30th September 2004 @ 03:09:57 AM AEST
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grief is so pwerful and consumes us for years and years. great poem on the effects of grief and how it can affect people. keep writing and i luv u heaps! ur a great poet!
luv u
becca |
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