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let the mind wander
Contributed by
socialmisfit
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Wednesday, 4th August 2004 @ 02:46:21 AM in AEST
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Swarming thoughts crowd my mind,
Sedating me to all without.
Engage me in mute amazement,
Perceiving ends about.
Spinning all around me,
Fluxing images congeal.
Pixilation of my delight,
Intoxication surreal.
Whim of a crushing leviathan,
Weaves my mental reality.
Revealing deepest recesses,
Threatening auto-fatality
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2004-08-04 02:46:21]
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Re: let the mind wander
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 4th August 2004 @ 03:38:02 AM AEST
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The last line made me smirk.
I read it aloud and found it rhythmic and resonant - I like your use of words, such as;
"Fluxing images congeal."
Although i'm not sure if 'fluxing' is a proper word, it is an interesting image nontheless.
Keep writing. |
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