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Visceral Thrill
Contributed by
Jackman
on
Thursday, 5th August 2004 @ 10:59:03 AM in AEST
Topic:
drugabuse
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waste of space
piece of ****
run away
take a hit
take a line
munch a pill
get something else
for that visceral thrill
tie that belt
around your arm
slip it in
feel no harm
drift away
float so high
another man
decides to die
those he loved
mourn and weep
as our man enters
eternal sleep
Copyright ©
Jackman
... [
2004-08-05 10:59:03]
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Re: Visceral Thrill
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by pixie on
Thursday, 5th August 2004 @ 11:10:40 AM AEST
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great poem, the flow was perfect
pixie xx |
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Re: Visceral Thrill
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by poet_of_anger on
Thursday, 5th August 2004 @ 11:14:00 AM AEST
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Yes, I agree, the flow was suberb. Very easy to read, nice job.
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Re: Visceral Thrill
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 5th August 2004 @ 01:11:10 PM AEST
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Hmm an intersting write on the banger who dies. Nice flow and rhythm add to the reality of the death of the man.
Angel always...joni |
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Re: Visceral Thrill
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 11th March 2005 @ 04:03:27 AM AEST
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Short and punchy. Heroin addiction is a bane on society, and this highlights the ease by which it destroys lives of addicts and their relatives alike.
Nice write, Jackman.
Keep writing and commenting. |
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