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Death and Rebirth
Contributed by
bobotheclown
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Wednesday, 11th August 2004 @ 10:11:30 PM in AEST
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These dark thoughts
They tear me apart every day
I can't look at myself
For fear of seeing the monster
Which writhes just below the surface
I can't look at myself
Because I am fearful
And ashamed of these thoughts
I hide inside myself
And wait for my rescuer,
But no one comes
And weak tears trickle
Down my face every night
Framing my insecurity and lack of confidence
I know I desprately need help
So help me now if your there
Defeated, I begin to dig a grave, my only option
Its darkness, somehow comforting
I pile everything in
My fear, my sense of failure,
My dark thoughts, my tears of worthlessness
I bury it all putting it behind me
Victorious, a smile cracks my saddened features
And I fall into the arms of Christ
Safe, my past buried, because of Him alone
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Re: Death and Rebirth
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by Jenni_K on
Wednesday, 11th August 2004 @ 11:39:56 PM AEST
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Welcome back, Joel!! This is really beautiful... I love the end..... and don't worry about not commenting.....we all have our lives away from here and can't always be here to comment ... Hope all is well with you...
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Re: Death and Rebirth
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by venkat on
Thursday, 12th August 2004 @ 12:46:29 AM AEST
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Well come back Joel... need not apologisze..
It looks dark except for the concluding lines..
very well written and well wrapped with your victorious smile...:-) venkat
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Re: Death and Rebirth
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by ps_ihateyou on
Thursday, 12th August 2004 @ 12:50:03 AM AEST
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| i love that! i can definitely relate to it...nice job :) |
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Re: Death and Rebirth
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by thumper on
Thursday, 12th August 2004 @ 06:40:27 AM AEST
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WoW!! This sounds familiar. I wish I could do that, just bury all my self-hate and insecurities. Nice lesson, though. Great job!
Thumps ; 0) |
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Re: Death and Rebirth
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by Kindredblood_dragon on
Saturday, 14th August 2004 @ 12:26:25 AM AEST
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Hey ya Joel good to see you are back in the thick of things again :)
Awesome write mate so much feeling wtihin, you held me inprisoned, and once released I was unable to leave with out savouring each once again.
Take care mate, |
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Re: Death and Rebirth
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by Soulless on
Monday, 6th September 2004 @ 11:31:39 PM AEST
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Hey, glad to have your poetry back. I was wondering what happened to you. Anyway, this is such a strong piece. It really moved me. I love how this poem unfolds as you read on. Almost like it was written in a story type form. I especially loved the line "I hide inside myself and wait for a rescuer... but no one comes" That really blew me away,
Kisses,
~Soulless~ |
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Re: Death and Rebirth
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by Essentially9 on
Wednesday, 9th February 2005 @ 08:36:29 PM AEST
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| very good poem joel. wish i could identify more with those one though. especially the ending. |
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