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Because I've Loved You
Contributed by
waos
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Wednesday, 11th August 2004 @ 10:55:12 PM in AEST
Topic:
SadPoetry
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Isn't it great to be this fake,
they can't see all I've come to be.
Throw your stones against my body,
until my vision of you is bleary.
I'm weakening inside but it's all I hide,
can you see anything real inside of me?
It makes me cry, how hard I've tried,
my strength is fading as I backslide.
Isn't it great to know it's all just a show,
I'd give this dance with death a chance in a breath.
Beat me down with your words until I collapse,
we'll just blame it on all my mishaps.
Tear asunder my heart and rip it apart,
your version, symbolic of your intrusion.
Break what strength is left in my bones,
leave me with only empty gravestones.
Cry crimson, eat poison,
break the bread before you're finally dead.
Pardon me while I begin to bleed,
don't ever think you've caused this evil deed.
Isn't it great to be this fake,
say goodbye but don't ask why.
I'm finishing this for all of you,
it was all because I've loved you.
Copyright ©
waos
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2004-08-11 22:55:12]
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Re: Because I've Loved You
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by bobotheclown on
Wednesday, 11th August 2004 @ 11:03:42 PM AEST
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this was awesome Kara. I really liked the line structure you had going on two-line sentences and the rhymes in the line that was really cool and as I told you, you of all people are not fake.
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Re: Because I've Loved You
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by drummerchic18 on
Wednesday, 11th August 2004 @ 11:14:34 PM AEST
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| this is awesome....truly breathtaking and I'm not just saying that. THis poem actually means a great deal to me...I've been like that for so many years...Would you read "My torment" it is also one of the "I think is sounds like suicide" and tell me how i did....I think u might enjoy it...i dunno...some ppl have hit me over my head for writing me (my best friend literally read it and then slapped me and said "what the hell SAM!" lol...ttyl.... |
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Re: Because I've Loved You
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by Stellar on
Saturday, 14th August 2004 @ 12:25:41 AM AEST
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| This is really good. You described the emotion beautifully. Very well written. |
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Re: Because I've Loved You
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by Shnyzz on
Thursday, 18th May 2006 @ 09:47:41 PM AEST
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| We allhave dark moments and thats what make the lighter days so much brighter |
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