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Split Personalities are Not Good for Your Healt
Contributed by
Ripper_Something_Unusual
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Thursday, 12th August 2004 @ 07:44:07 PM in AEST
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My nauseous pit of a stomach,
Its burining
Buring,
somebodyhelpme!
My empty canvas of a head,
Is painting these nightmares,
its calling me names,
Take me to the park for my excecution,
Im a man no more,
My inner demons take me over and I dont want it,
Release is the only way to save me and yourself.
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2004-08-12 19:44:07]
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Re: Split Personalities are Not Good for Your Healt
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by CrimsonTears on
Thursday, 12th August 2004 @ 10:08:08 PM AEST
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This is an awesome write...i loke it alot...excellent job
Lots of Love
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Re: Split Personalities are Not Good for Your Healt
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by girltranscended on
Saturday, 28th May 2005 @ 11:11:35 PM AEST
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yes it is good and specifically (cause isn't that best?) the "somebodyhelpme!" is so cool, I sooo dig the run together words and this is placed quite well. Second, Hell ya there's more, I love the whole stomach then head thing, I like the the shortness of this too, it need not be long. The "Im a man no more" is a place where I paused and came back to (it has spawed thought like, well, salmon?) Great job!
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