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Maybe...
Contributed by
holderofthestone
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Saturday, 14th August 2004 @ 06:10:53 PM in AEST
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maybe when you left that day
you didnt know the truth
of what you truly meant to me
so caught up in your youth
maybe as the years passed by
my thought came less each day
but my love for you never died
it just wont fade away
maybe when you married him
and said the words I do
you pictured me in his place
standing there with you
maybe as your children grow
their loving pure embrace
will remind of our younger days
or my disappearing face
maybe when your older
and your children all on their own
you'll recall the words I vowed
and how you left me all alone
maybe with you dying breath
you'll sit and think of me
of all our happy times
that never came to be
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2004-08-14 18:10:53]
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Re: Maybe...
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by Kevin on
Saturday, 14th August 2004 @ 08:36:15 PM AEST
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Wow, that was really really good, really sad too. I don't know if that was based on a true event, and if it was, I want you to know that I will pray for you to get through this heartbreak.
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Re: Maybe...
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by shelby on
Saturday, 14th August 2004 @ 09:15:01 PM AEST
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this is breath taking
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Re: Maybe...
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by Fionndruinne on
Saturday, 14th August 2004 @ 10:15:20 PM AEST
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Sounds like a sad story. I'm sorry to read it. But you did well with this poem. Well done. And keep your hope up! Day will come again.
Slàn
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Re: Maybe...
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by Silent-No-More on
Sunday, 15th August 2004 @ 05:49:05 PM AEST
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This.... totals me. Oh gosh, holder... this is really quite powerful. 'Maybe"... the word alone (at least as you use it) kept tugging at my heart each time you included it. I like this one an awful lot. There's one particular verse that filled my eyes with tears. I'd copy it here... but I know that if I saw those words, standing alone from the rest of the poem, I'd probably turn into a big sobbing puddle.
Beatiful, holder... and, well, kind of 'ouch' you know?
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Re: Maybe...
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by MDodgen on
Tuesday, 17th August 2004 @ 09:28:33 PM AEST
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SO SAD, BUT SO BEAUTIFULLY WRITTEN.
maybe when you married him
and said the words I do
you pictured me in his place
standing there with you
I HOPE YOU DIDN'T FEEL THIS WAY WITH ME. LOVE YOU ALWAYS AND FOREVER BABY. |
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Re: Maybe...
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by Living_In_My_Dream on
Sunday, 22nd August 2004 @ 02:21:55 AM AEST
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lol, a beautiful write...again...I applaud this write...
much love,
Dani |
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