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Act Of Passion
Contributed by
Nazmythian
on
Wednesday, 18th August 2004 @ 12:13:39 PM in AEST
Topic:
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Patiently waiting
Sublime anticipation
Resistance gives way
To insistent persuasion
As flesh separates
To allow penetration
The bodys fluids
Lubricate this invasion
Blood flowing through veins
Multiplies the equation
Repetitious act
Filled with lusting elation
A silent scream is
A throttled emanation
The gasping of breath
Fascinating fixation
The body twitches
In remote animation
Realization
Then frantic desperation
With questioning eyes
That demand explanation
I remove my knife
And its deadly serrations
She was MY daughter ~
Enjoy your destination
( I know youre out there Tim, Im coming )
Copyright ©
Nazmythian
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2004-08-18 12:13:39]
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Re: Act Of Passion
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by pixie on
Wednesday, 18th August 2004 @ 12:22:26 PM AEST
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a very deep, dark write...
pixie xx |
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Re: Act Of Passion
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 18th August 2004 @ 12:44:08 PM AEST
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!!!
whew!
retribution I'll assume... |
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Re: Act Of Passion
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by WinterFawn on
Wednesday, 18th August 2004 @ 01:01:44 PM AEST
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Run Tim, RUN!....*shiver*
This is an awesome poem. Very dark and chilling!
WinterFawn
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Re: Act Of Passion
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 18th August 2004 @ 02:53:26 PM AEST
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Wow! This was a very darkly interesting write. It completely captivated me. I think the last line gave me a chill. The most wonderful thing about this was the fact that you pulled off something few poets can. You continued with one steady rhyme from beginning to end. Not only this, but your rhyme word choices were always excellent, and not bland or cliche.
Excellent Write!!! |
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Re: Act Of Passion
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by FleurdeSang on
Thursday, 26th August 2004 @ 03:56:01 PM AEST
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::shudders:: Such anguish and hate... VERY dark poem, Naz... And I can see why. I understand your pain... People like that don't deserve to live a free life... Excellent flow, and a chilling end... I got goosebumps ::rarely happens:: Perfect expression of angst and loathing... As always, all my love and respects... I hope you are living a brighter life now... No one deserves to live in the shadows, with only suicidal thoughts for comfort... Heart-wrenching, and disturbing... But perfect. Your emotions were eloquently described here.. Loved it. God bless, and peace be thine, mon ami!
Your dearst fleur de souffrance... |
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Re: Act Of Passion
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by critterhideaway on
Wednesday, 8th September 2004 @ 01:24:36 PM AEST
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| I love this, I'm sure every father might have these thoughts if they have a growing daughter |
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